Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

We met during our flight earlier yesterday from London to Ireland. During our discussion, we got to know each other and you mentioned once in your discussion that you had a chain of restaurants and were in the food industry.

You mentioned that you were looking for a manager to oversee your day to day operations as a manager at your restaurant in Ireland. I researched a little bit about the job position and felt that I matched the requirements of the position. I thought that it wouldn't hurt to reach out to you directly as you mentioned that you would put in a good word if I applied.

I live relatively close to the restaurant and also have several years of experience in Management and Hospitality. I've also been working at a reknown restaurant in London for a while but due to some personal reasons, I've had to come back to Ireland to stay with my family.

Please let me know if there is a possibility of thi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The letter is relevant and covers the main points: you identify the flight from London to Ireland, express interest in a restaurant-management role, and mention your hospitality experience and proximity to the restaurant. However, some details are unclear or insufficiently developed. “Earlier yesterday” does not give a precise meeting context, and the job description is repetitive (“manager to oversee your day to day operations as a manager”). Your reasons for suitability could be more specific—for example, describe a responsibility or achievement from your London role. The ending is cut off at “possibility of thi,” so the request and a suitable closing are missing. Completing the enquiry and explaining your qualifications more clearly would make the purpose fully effective.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information is arranged in a generally sensible order: you recall the meeting, discuss the vacancy, and then explain your experience. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and the reader can follow the overall purpose. Some linking and referencing are less controlled, however. “During our discussion” is followed by “in your discussion,” which is repetitive and makes the reference slightly awkward; “you mentioned” is also repeated several times. The second paragraph combines the job description, your research, your suitability, and the earlier offer of support, so its progression feels crowded. The final sentence is incomplete, disrupting the letter’s conclusion. Use clearer transitions and finish with a direct request and sign-off.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use an adequate range for the topic, including “chain of restaurants,” “day to day operations,” “Hospitality,” and “experience in Management.” These choices communicate the relevant work context, though some wording is repetitive or imprecise. “Manager” appears twice in the same job description, while “got to know each other” is general and adds little detail. There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice issues: “reknown” should be “renowned,” and “job position” is less natural than “position” or “role.” Aim for precise, natural collocations and avoid unnecessary repetition. For instance, you could describe the specific operational or customer-service experience that makes you a strong candidate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response includes a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, such as “I thought that it wouldn't hurt to reach out to you directly as you mentioned…” and “I've also been working… but due to some personal reasons…”. Most meaning remains clear, and the tense choices generally suit the account. Some grammatical and punctuation control needs attention. “Earlier yesterday” is an awkward time expression, and “as a manager at your restaurant” makes the job description repetitive and structurally unclear. The final sentence, “Please let me know if there is a possibility of thi,” is incomplete, leaving the clause unfinished. Check sentence completion and punctuation carefully, and simplify constructions when they become difficult to control.

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