Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Langston

We actually met recently on a flight, I was the passenger next to you. We talked about a possible business opportunity, so I wanted to give you a little nudge about the situation.

We had discussed the diversity of positions your restaurant suggests, but I prefer filling a managing role as I see myself suitable for such a job.

That said, I would find myself most useful in guiding people and giving advice to new workers as well as properly welcoming our customers. I've actually had the opportunity to be a manager at an Icecream shop, therefore I have the experience needed for the position.

Some of the feedbacks I got from my recent job were that I'm kind and understanding. On top of that, I work well under pressure. So, avoiding workplace issues and inappropriate behaviors is my field of expertise.

I would like to experience what it's like to work with you Mr. Langston. I wish you a good day.

Best regards, Alaa.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you remind Mr Langston that you met on a flight, identify a management role, and give relevant reasons for your suitability, including previous experience and your ability to work under pressure. These details make the purpose clear. However, the meeting reminder is quite general: “recently on a flight” does not specify when or where beyond the plane, and the job request could be more precise about the type of management position you seek. Your reasons are relevant but some are not fully explained—for example, how your experience managing an ice-cream shop prepared you for a restaurant role. More specific details and a direct request for next steps would make the letter more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible overall order: you refer to the meeting, describe the role you want, explain your strengths, and close politely. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages, and linking phrases such as “That said” and “On top of that” guide the reader. Some connections are less clear or sound mechanical, however. “We talked about a possible business opportunity” is vague, and “So, avoiding workplace issues and inappropriate behaviors is my field of expertise” does not clearly follow from being kind and working under pressure. The final paragraph also moves quickly from your suitability to a general expression of interest. Make the links between each quality and the job explicit, and end with a clear request to discuss an interview or application.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a job enquiry, including “managing role,” “guiding people,” “under pressure,” and “field of expertise.” These phrases communicate your experience and strengths, and the meaning is generally clear. Some choices are imprecise or unnatural for a formal letter: “give you a little nudge” is too casual, “the diversity of positions your restaurant suggests” is unclear, and “feedbacks” is not the natural form in this context. “Icecream” should be written as “ice cream.” Aim for precise, professional collocations and avoid wording that could suggest a different meaning from the one intended. This would make your vocabulary more flexible and appropriate to the business context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause in “Some of the feedbacks I got from my recent job were that…” and the reason clause “as I see myself suitable for such a job.” Most of the message remains understandable, and you show some control of sentence boundaries. There are some errors in punctuation and grammatical construction. The opening sentence joins two independent clauses with a comma: “We actually met recently on a flight, I was the passenger next to you.” Also, “I see myself suitable” needs a different construction, such as “I consider myself suitable,” and the closing “I wish you a good day” would be better punctuated as a separate sentence. Review comma splices and sentence patterns to improve accuracy.

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