Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well, i am writing this letter regarding a job that i want to do in your restaurant. We met on October 1 while we were travelling from Abbotsford to Calgary by plane. During our journey you told me about the restaurants that you have in Abbotsford.

Moreover, now i want to do job in one of your restaurants. I was working for a quick service company, where i made fried chicken and pizza. Now i want to do job as a cook in your organization. Because in fine-dining restaurant i can learn new things like new dishes and also i can get to know about other professions such as server.

At last, i would say that as i have 1 year experience in cooking, this position would be perfect for me because by doing this work i will not only improve my skills but also i can help the company to achieve their goals.

I hope you will approach me as soon as possible.

Thank you

Garry

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you identify the flight from Abbotsford to Calgary on October 1, state that you want a cook’s position, and give your year of cooking experience as a reason you may be suitable. The examples of preparing fried chicken and pizza make your background relevant. However, the suitability explanation is less fully developed: the claim that you can help the company achieve its goals is general, and learning about other professions does not clearly show why you would be a strong cook. The letter also does not give the businessman’s name, so “Dear Sir” is less personal than the situation invites. Add a specific strength, such as food preparation, working efficiently, or maintaining quality, and connect it directly to the role.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it opens with the purpose, recalls the meeting, explains the job interest, and closes with a suitability statement and sign-off. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and the reader can follow the main message. Some links feel mechanical or do not express the relationship between ideas precisely. For example, “Moreover” introduces a point that is more a continuation than an additional argument, while “At last” is not a natural signal for the final reason. The sentence beginning “Because in fine-dining restaurant…” is also detached from the preceding sentence, which weakens the flow. Use simpler, more purposeful transitions and connect the reason for wanting to learn with the cook role.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate your purpose, including “quick service company,” “fried chicken,” “fine-dining restaurant,” and “experience in cooking.” These details make the letter specific. However, several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, particularly “do job” and “your organization,” and “approach me” does not convey the intended request naturally. “Other professions such as server” is also an awkward way to describe learning about restaurant work. Aim for more natural collocations and a suitably professional tone, such as “apply for a position,” “your restaurant group,” and “contact me.” More precise wording would make your interest and qualifications sound clearer and more confident.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the conditional-style explanation “as I have 1 year experience… this position would be perfect for me” and the “not only…but also” construction. The main meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. In “i am writing,” the pronoun needs a capital letter, and the sentence joins two independent clauses with a comma. “I was working for a quick service company, where i made…” also needs consistent capitalization. Other examples include “in fine-dining restaurant,” which needs an article, and “as i have 1 year experience,” which needs an article before “year.” Review sentence boundaries, articles, and capitalization, while keeping the useful variety of sentence structures.

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