Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mathew,

I hope you are well and reached home safely. I hope you remember me we met in plane while we were travelling to Calgary. I was sitting next to you wearing white shirt and black jeans. We had a long talk regarding your business. You suggested me for job in your restaurant.

As recently i have completed my studies in project management and now I am available full time. I have recently visited your profile and seen there is a job opening for manager in your restuarant.

I mentioned before as i have completed my degree in project management so i think it would be best oppurtunity for me to begin. I am not begineer in this field i have also work as manager in India heart restaurant before. I have great knowledge of applications like excel, quickbooks even though i can make paystubs for working employess. I would be a great help for you also. As in this vast growing I want to be progessed in my life. I was very inspired by your past events.

i HOPE YOU UNDERSTAND MY SITUATION AND GIVE ME CHANCE FOR THE OPPURTUNITY

Best regards,

Akarsh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you remind Mathew that you met on a flight to Calgary, identify your interest in a restaurant manager position, and give relevant reasons for your suitability, including your project-management degree and previous managerial experience in India. The purpose of contacting him is clear. However, some points are less fully developed: the meeting reminder could be more precise, and your experience and skills would be more persuasive if you explained how they would help his restaurant. The final request for a chance is understandable, but the letter would benefit from a more direct, professional closing that clearly asks about the vacancy and next steps.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from the meeting, to the job you want, and then to your qualifications. Paragraphing helps separate these main stages, and phrases such as “As recently” and “I mentioned before” attempt to connect ideas. However, some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “As in this vast growing I want to be progessed in my life,” which interrupts the progression. The qualifications are also crowded into one paragraph, while the final request appears in capital letters and feels disconnected from the preceding explanation. Use clearer transitions and group related details so the reader can follow your case smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “project management,” “job opening,” “manager,” and “full time,” so the reader can understand your main purpose. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as naming Excel and QuickBooks. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “restuarant,” “oppurtunity,” “begineer,” and “progessed.” Some phrases are unnatural or unclear, such as “make paystubs for working employess” and “in this vast growing.” These issues make parts of the letter harder to interpret and limit the precision of your vocabulary. Check spelling carefully and choose standard professional expressions for describing your experience and skills.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main message is generally understandable. However, some grammatical errors affect clarity and control. For example, “I hope you remember me we met in plane” joins two clauses without suitable punctuation or a linking word; “You suggested me for job” has an incomplete grammatical pattern; and “I have also work as manager” uses an incorrect verb form. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, especially in “i HOPE YOU UNDERSTAND.” Use complete sentences, check verb forms and articles, and punctuate longer ideas carefully. These corrections would make your meaning clearer while preserving the range you are attempting.

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