Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I hope you are doing well, We had recently meet on 25 of april when you were returning from your meeting and luckly we were siting next to each other. AT that time you had suggested me to contact you for a job oppurtinity.

I did go through your company's website a found that you have a open position for head of supervisor. I am really interested in this role due to my long term work experince in this industry.

Also I have the experties of a leader, great customer satisfaction level.

I would like to formally apply for this role, as with my skill sets and high skill sets perfectly alligns with the job requirments. Furthermore, at my current possition I mange 3 location on my own. which would defenitely helpfull for your company.

Kind Regards.

Yash Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main purpose and all three requested points: you identify the journey and date, express interest in a supervisory role, and give relevant experience managing three locations. However, the meeting details are incomplete because you do not name the route or destination, and the job title “head of supervisor” is unclear. Your suitability is asserted through “long term work experience” and leadership, but these points need specific support, such as describing your responsibilities or achievements. The letter is also below the required 150 words, so there is limited space to develop your case. Add clearer meeting details and explain how your experience matches the restaurant role.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you recall the meeting, identify a vacancy, and explain your suitability before closing. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages, and “Also” and “Furthermore” signal additional information. However, the progression is sometimes weakened by unclear links, particularly “I did go through your company's website a found,” where the relationship between the ideas is difficult to follow. The final paragraph repeats the application point and “high skill sets” without adding a distinct reason. Use more precise transitions and organise the suitability details into a clear sequence—for example, leadership experience followed by your responsibility for three locations. A conventional closing and punctuation would also make the letter feel more complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for a job enquiry, including “position,” “industry,” “leader,” and “formally apply,” so the reader can understand your general purpose. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “oppurtinity,” “experties,” “possition,” and “requirm ents” (written as “requirments”) are noticeable. Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “head of supervisor” and “great customer satisfaction level.” Repetition of “skill sets” further limits variety. Choose standard job titles and collocations, and check spelling carefully. For example, “supervisory position” and “strong customer-service skills” would communicate your qualifications more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Furthermore,” and a reason clause with “as.” However, errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries are frequent enough to make parts of the letter difficult to read. Examples include “We had recently meet,” “we were siting,” and “you have a open position”; these need accurate tense, verb form, and article use. The sentence “which would defenitely helpfull for your company” is also incomplete and lacks a correctly formed verb. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “AT” and the comma splice after “doing well.” Practise accurate basic clauses first, then build longer sentences with controlled linking.

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