Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear boss,

I Dr hina working as a physician at Government hospital would like to remind you that we met at the aeroplane on the way to Switzerland as you have mentioned about the business you own .I would like to be part of it and work as a part time waiteress there to meet my expenses.As I have good communication skills and apperance somehow I can increase customer flow in your restaurant as well I can I hope you will consider me for this post I will be highly thankful to you for considering me for this post .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by reminding the businessman that you met on a plane travelling to Switzerland, requesting part-time waitress work, and giving reasons you may suit the role. However, the response is only 100 words, below the required 150, so the request and supporting details remain under-developed. The meeting reminder is vague: adding when the journey took place and recalling a specific detail from your conversation would make it clearer. Your reasons—communication skills and a pleasant appearance—are relevant, but need explanation or examples, such as experience serving customers. The letter also needs a more appropriate greeting and a clear closing. Develop each bullet point with specific information to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas are relevant and appear in a broadly sensible order: you identify yourself and the meeting, state the job you want, then give reasons. However, the response is presented as one long, crowded sentence, so the reader has to work to separate these points. The linking phrase “as well” is not used clearly, and “I hope you will consider me” runs into the final expression of thanks without effective punctuation. Use separate sentences and short paragraphs—for example, one for the meeting and job request, and another for your suitability and closing. This would create clearer progression and make the relationships between ideas easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “part time,” “communication skills,” “customer flow,” and “consider me for this post.” The range is limited, though, and several choices or spelling errors make the letter less natural: “waiteress” is misspelled, “apperance” is incorrect, and “increase customer flow” is an awkward way to describe attracting customers. “Dear boss” is also too informal and unsuitable for a professional letter to someone you have just met. Choose precise, conventional expressions such as “part-time waitress,” “pleasant manner,” and “attract more customers.” A wider range of job-related vocabulary would help you explain your suitability more convincingly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine several ideas, but it relies on one long sentence and has frequent problems with sentence boundaries and grammatical structure. For example, “I Dr hina working as a physician” is missing a verb, while “I can increase customer flow in your restaurant as well I can I hope” joins clauses without a clear structure. The opening also needs punctuation after the introductory information, and the final request and thanks should be separated into complete sentences. These errors sometimes make the message difficult to follow. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then add a few accurately formed complex sentences using clear connectors such as “because” or “as.”

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