Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear,Mr. Kamote

Hi Mr.Kamote do you remember one passenger seating biside you during our journey way to Manila from America,

I remember we talk about possible job in your restaurant.Fo now, I think that I have a capability to do some job in your restaurant.If you dont mind im the one fit for a chef job for your restaurant i have a ten years expirience as a chef cook in my recent job I have experience in defferent type of menu specially a chinesse dishes it would be help to to get a more customer in your restaurant .I would like to send my CV to your personal email for your review.If you have queation about my availability you can send message to my Whattsapp acount [redacted phone]) or you can reply to my email.Looking forward hearing from you thank you very much for your time .Hoping that i can share my talent as a chef in your restaurant.

respecfully

Palautog

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you remind Mr Kamote that you met on the journey from America to Manila, identify the chef position you want, and support your application with ten years of experience and knowledge of Chinese dishes. These details make the letter relevant and give the reader a reason to consider you. However, the meeting reminder is vague: “one passenger seating beside you” does not clearly say when the journey took place. Your suitability is also only partly developed; you mention experience and cuisine, but could add a specific strength, such as managing a kitchen or preparing popular dishes. The request to send your CV and your contact details are useful, though the letter would benefit from a clearer, more complete closing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: you refer to the meeting, state your interest in a chef job, give experience, and explain how the businessman can contact you. This gives the reader the main information. However, nearly the whole message is presented as one long paragraph, so the different purposes are not clearly separated. Several ideas run together, particularly the experience, Chinese dishes, and attracting customers. The opening also repeats the greeting and meeting reference (“Hi Mr.Kamote” after “Dear,Mr. Kamote”), while the final lines do not form a clear, conventional sign-off. Use short paragraphs and linking phrases such as “Regarding the position” and “I would be happy to discuss this further” to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to applying for restaurant work, including “chef,” “experience,” “menu,” “CV,” and “availability.” These choices communicate the main purpose, and mentioning Chinese dishes adds useful detail. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause, for example “biside,” “defferent,” “chinesse,” and “queation.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “a chef cook” and “share my talent as a chef.” Aim for accurate, conventional expressions in a formal job enquiry, such as “ten years’ experience as a chef” and “I would welcome the opportunity to contribute my skills.” Proofreading spelling and collocations would make your vocabulary more precise and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally understand your main message. For example, you explain your experience and then connect it to the restaurant’s potential customers. However, some sentence structures are difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear punctuation: “I have a ten years expirience … it would be help…” The opening question, “do you remember one passenger seating beside you,” also has problems with question structure and verb form. There are further errors in articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “a ten years” and “it would be help.” Use shorter sentences, check verb forms and articles, and punctuate each complete idea. This will help you show a wider range of structures with clearer control.

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