Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Respected sir,

I hope you are doing well in your life. My name is parth. We met last month when you were flying to Canada to india 13 of december. I was seat next to you.

You tolld me about you have chain of restaurent and I was surprise by your growth and get more motivation. I am looking for management roels in your company if you are looking for person.

I have 2 years of experience in management field and i want to join your company so i can improve me self since you have larege chain of restaurent and this experience will give benefits to both of us.

looking forwart to hearing from you.

your truly,

Parth

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover the three requested points: you refer to meeting on a flight, express interest in management work, and mention two years of management experience. However, the details are not always clear: “flying to Canada to india 13 of december” makes the date and direction of travel difficult to understand, and “if you are looking for person” does not clearly explain what role you are seeking. Your reason for suitability is also under-developed; experience is mentioned, but no relevant skills or examples are given. The response is 119 words, so it does not meet the 150-word minimum. Add clear, accurate meeting details and develop your suitability with specific examples, such as staff supervision or customer-service experience.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally understandable sequence: you introduce yourself and the meeting, explain your interest, give a reason for applying, and close politely. This coherent overall arrangement helps the reader follow your purpose. However, the ideas are compressed into a few short paragraphs, and the connection between your experience and the job is not fully explained. For example, “I have 2 years of experience in management field” is followed by wanting to improve yourself, rather than a clear link to how you could contribute to the restaurant. Use separate paragraphs for the meeting, the role, and your qualifications, and add linking phrases such as “As a result” or “In addition” where they clarify the progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “chain of restaurants,” “management,” “experience,” and “motivation,” so your main purpose can be understood. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the letter difficult to read: “restaurent,” “surprise,” “roels,” and “larege.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “improve me self” and “give benefits to both of us.” Choose more precise expressions for a job enquiry, such as “management position,” “develop my skills,” and “contribute to your business.” Proofreading spelling and using natural collocations would make your message clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, and the reader can usually identify your main message. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and punctuation occur often enough to affect clarity. For example, “you were flying to Canada to india 13 of december” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “You tolld me about you have chain” incorrectly combines “about” with a clause. “I want to join your company so i can improve me self” also needs more accurate pronouns and capitalization. Practise forming clear past-tense sentences about the meeting and use complete, correctly punctuated sentences to explain your experience and suitability.

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