Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am the lady that seated near you in the plane on the 15 July 2026 as you are traveling to the United States of America. Chika is my name, you gave me your business card and asked me to come to your restaurant on the 10 August 2026 in person that you have a job for me.

I am writing to inform i will be there the exact date.

I will be glad if the job of Assistant Administrator will be giving to me.

I read Administration Management in my University. I

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the journey and date, request an Assistant Administrator role, and mention your university studies, so the letter is relevant to the task. However, the response is incomplete: it does not clearly explain why your education or experience makes you suitable, and the meeting details are confusing in “you asked me to come to your restaurant on the 10 August … that you have a job for me.” The letter also stops abruptly at “I”, leaving the final point undeveloped and without a proper closing. The required minimum length is not met, which limits how fully you can address the three bullet points. Add specific evidence of relevant skills or experience and complete the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas appear in a broadly sensible order: you identify yourself and the meeting, state your intended visit, and then name the job you want. This gives the reader a basic framework. However, the response is very brief and has no clear paragraph development or closing, while the long opening sentence combines several details in a confusing way. The transition from “I will be there” to the job request is also abrupt, and the final “I” leaves the message unfinished. Use separate paragraphs for the meeting, your job interest, and your suitability, and connect them with simple, accurate transitions such as “As we discussed” and “I believe I would be suitable because…”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “business card,” “Assistant Administrator,” and “Administration Management,” which helps communicate the purpose of the letter. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the lady that seated near you,” “come to your restaurant … in person,” and “the job … will be giving to me.” These choices make parts of the message harder to understand and do not consistently suit a formal job enquiry. Aim for conventional professional expressions and more precise language about your qualifications and skills. For example, describe the role as one you are “interested in applying for” and explain relevant abilities such as organisation or customer service.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates its basic message through mostly simple sentence patterns, but the range is limited and errors occur in key structures. In “I am the lady that seated near you,” the verb phrase is incomplete; “I will be there the exact date” is missing a preposition; and “the job … will be giving to me” uses an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also shifts awkwardly between past and present forms (“you … in the plane … as you are traveling”), making the timeline unclear. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, and the final sentence is unfinished. Practise complete past-tense clauses for the meeting and accurate forms such as “I would be grateful if you would consider me for the position.”

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