Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to remind of me who met on a recent plan journey on the last week. It was a pleasure to meet you.The enjoying flight was a good experience with you, as well as gathering knowledge about business market. As you told me about restaurants, i would prefer to talk about opportunities.

To begin with, i am pursuing BBA in supply chain management. I am looking for a full time time job in the supply chain field. I am not only sending this letter for supply chain jobs, but also to share my background. I am working in transportation company as a operation leader who runs the operation with manager. If you could facilitate me, i will grow in my career.

Apart from this, I know that you are businessman who holds a chain of restaurants. Hence, you have contact with suppliers and buyers who has own their business related supply chain management. I hope you woild help me to find suitable job for me.

Kind regards,

Jiya patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You make a relevant attempt to explain your interest in work and give useful background, including your BBA studies and current role as an operations leader. However, the task is only partly addressed: you do not clearly identify a job in one of his restaurants, instead focusing on supply-chain work and asking him to help you find a suitable job. The meeting details are also vague: “on a recent plane journey” does not specify where or when you met, and “on the last week” is unclear. Your suitability is suggested through your studies and experience but not explained with specific skills or achievements. State the restaurant role you want, clarify the journey details, and connect your experience directly to that role.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable structure, with an opening, two body paragraphs and a polite closing. The ideas generally move from the meeting to your background and then to a request for help. However, the progression is not always clear: the first paragraph shifts from recalling the flight to discussing business, while the second introduces supply-chain work without clearly linking it to a job in the restaurants. Connect each paragraph more directly to one purpose in the task. Some linking phrases, such as “To begin with” and “Apart from this,” feel mechanical or do not show the relationship between ideas precisely. Clearer transitions and more direct references to the businessman and the opportunity would make the letter easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “supply chain management,” “operation leader,” “suppliers” and “buyers,” which helps communicate your background. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, making parts of the letter awkward or unclear. For example, “The enjoying flight” and “gathering knowledge about business market” do not express your meaning naturally, while “facilitate me” is not an appropriate way to ask for help with a job. There are also spelling and form errors such as “woild.” Aim for precise, natural phrases suited to a professional letter, and use vocabulary that describes your relevant skills rather than repeating general references to supply-chain work.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including “I am not only sending this letter … but also to share my background” and the sentence beginning “Hence,” but these structures are often faulty. Errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles and agreement occur frequently and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “I am writing this letter to remind of me who met” does not form a clear grammatical sentence, and “suppliers and buyers who has” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. There are also problems with capitalization and punctuation, such as lowercase “i” and missing spaces after full stops. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer sentences while checking that each clause has a clear subject and verb.

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