Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear jackson,

Hi,hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to remind you about me and our conersation we had during our flight . I think you remember that i was sitting next to you and we were talking about our plans and professions. Moreover, you told me about your buisness of restaurents so i was thinking about it and i metioned to you that i did a chef course last year . As i am looking for a job and then i remind you and planed to write a letter to you to make sure that you have a place for me as a chef in one of your restaurent . It would be a great oppurtunity for me to show my culinary skills and make our bond more stronger in buisness . I will be very thankful to you .

your truly friend

Amrinder

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the main purpose by reminding the businessman of your conversation on the flight, asking about a chef position, and mentioning your chef course. However, the reminder is not specific enough: you do not say when the journey took place or identify the route or destination, and the reason you would suit the role is only briefly stated as having completed a course and possessing culinary skills. The request for a job is understandable, but the letter would be more convincing if you explained relevant experience or particular strengths. The response also falls two words short of the required minimum. Add a little detail about the meeting and your qualifications, while keeping the tone appropriately professional.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter follows a generally understandable order: you refer to the flight conversation, explain your interest in a chef role, and close with your name. Basic linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “As I am looking for a job” help connect the ideas. However, most of the content is placed in one long paragraph, so the progression is not clearly signposted, and several links feel mechanical or unclear. For example, “so I was thinking about it” does not explain the connection between the restaurant discussion and your decision to write. Use separate paragraphs for the reminder, your job request, and your suitability, and make each transition more direct.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the central message, including “chef course,” “culinary skills,” and “restaurant.” However, the range is limited, and several spelling errors make the letter less polished: “conersation,” “buisness,” “restaurents,” and “oppurtunity.” Some expressions are also unnatural or unsuitable for a job enquiry, such as “make our bond more stronger in buisness” and “your truly friend.” Choose more precise professional wording, such as describing your cooking skills or relevant experience, and check spelling carefully. A wider range of accurate phrases would make your request clearer and more appropriate for writing to a potential employer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences using clauses and connectors, for example, “As I am looking for a job … I planned to write a letter to you,” but these structures are often difficult to follow. There are frequent problems with sentence boundaries and punctuation, including the run-on sequence beginning “Moreover, you told me…” and missing spaces after commas. Verb forms and tense choices are inconsistent: “I remind you” and “planed to write” do not fit the past context, while “I did a chef course” is not formed naturally. Capitalisation and sentence openings also need attention. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurate tense and punctuation.

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