Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.

Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter

• remind him when and where you met
• tell him what kind of job you are interested in
• say why you think you would be suitable for the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,I would like to remind you that we meet each on trip to France, when we were traveled and observed the historical tourist attractions there in France. we also rambled around the back streets to find something more exciting . And we also shared our feels about that land in detail with each other. You gave to told me that i can contact you if i need kind job in your chain of retaurants.I am trained chefs and served in differents hotels more than 20 years. i leaved my lost job due my long visit to France. I'm entirely confident job under your command would benefit your business as well me ,because my cooking are very high and i'm specialist in Italian and Freach cousion. I'm hoping that you would allow me to work with your team. I once again ensured you my services in your organization will be beneficial for both parties .Hoping best for my future. Your sincerely, Javed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three required points: you refer to meeting during a journey to France, express interest in working in the businessman’s restaurant chain, and give relevant experience as a chef in hotels. Your claim of more than 20 years’ experience and specialisation in Italian and French cuisine helps explain your suitability. However, the meeting details are unclear: the task specifies a plane journey, but your account of travelling around France and visiting attractions makes it sound as though you met while sightseeing. The type of restaurant job is also not stated precisely, and your reasons for being suitable could be developed with a specific skill or example. Clarifying these points and making the request more direct would make the letter more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: you recall the meeting, describe your experience, and then explain why you would be a good employee. This gives the reader an overall sense of purpose. However, the ideas are crowded into long blocks, with little paragraphing to distinguish the reminder, job request, and suitability. Some links are repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “and,” while the transition from the France trip to your work history is abrupt. The closing phrases also repeat the idea that your services would benefit both parties. Use separate paragraphs for each main purpose and connect them with clearer, less repetitive transitions to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant employment vocabulary, including “trained chefs,” “chain of restaurants,” “specialist,” and “services,” so the reader can understand the general purpose of the letter. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “historical tourist attractions.” However, inaccurate word choices and spelling sometimes make the message difficult to interpret, as in “shared our feels,” “ram bled around the back streets,” and “my lost job.” “Under your command” is also an unnatural way to describe working for someone. Choose standard, precise expressions for professional correspondence, and check spelling and collocations carefully; this will make your experience and request sound more credible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason clause with “because,” and the main message is generally recoverable. However, verb forms and sentence construction are often inaccurate: “we meet each” and “when we were traveled” do not express the past meeting correctly, while “You gave to told me” is not a grammatical structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation, for example “I am trained chefs” and “my cooking are very high.” Several sentences run together without appropriate capitalisation or full stops. Practise forming clear past-tense sentences and checking subject–verb agreement, then divide longer ideas into shorter, correctly punctuated sentences.

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