Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, people prefer living in peace and security weither in the city or in the countryside, the main reason is to have a confortable house. However, others convainced it is more crucial to preserve the countryside and not build new homes there.

For me, i'm in part with this affirmation and that's for many reasons. First of all, the protection of our mother nature is a collective responsability, builduig new homes will provide directly to build new accommodations as schools, hospitals, manufacturing, magazines..ect which affect green spaces. In the other hand, means of transport will increase in correlation polluted gazes too.

I used to live in the countryside, but unfortently with excessif buildings we've lost the charm and the beauty of the region, fresh air is not the same as the first time we came living there.

However, it's a fact that we can't ignore, so it would be wiser if we constructe on appropriate countryside without exagerating, and leaving animals on their confortable zone and best conditions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a relevant opinion: you partly agree that countryside should be protected, while allowing some carefully chosen development. Your personal example about losing the region’s charm and fresh air supports this position. However, the response addresses the task only partially because the ideas are brief and under-developed: for example, you mention that housing may lead to schools, hospitals and transport, but do not explain this chain or weigh its benefits against environmental harm. The conclusion also introduces building in “appropriate countryside” without defining what makes an area suitable. The response contains 160 words, below the required 250; 8 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop both sides with specific reasons and examples, and state your position more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph giving reasons and personal experience, and a concluding qualification. Linking expressions such as “First of all” and “However” help signal the direction of the argument. At this level, though, progression is limited because several different points are compressed into one paragraph, and the relationship between them is not always clear. For instance, the sentence about homes leading to schools, hospitals and manufacturing is followed by transport and pollution without explaining how these points connect. “In the other hand” is also an inaccurate linking phrase. Use separate paragraphs for environmental costs, housing needs and your personal example, and connect each point with clear explanation rather than relying mainly on transition words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “preserve the countryside,” “green spaces,” “polluted gases” and “the charm and the beauty of the region.” These choices show that you can express the main environmental concerns. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to read, such as “confortable,” “responsability,” “builduig,” “excessif” and “confortable zone.” Some expressions are also imprecise: “manufacturing, magazines” does not clearly identify the facilities you mean, and “polluted gases” is less natural than “vehicle emissions.” Build a small bank of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “However” and a conditional idea in “it would be wiser if…”. Nevertheless, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. The opening joins two independent ideas with a comma, while “others convinced it is more crucial” is missing a suitable verb form. There are also problems with sentence construction in “will provide directly to build” and “we’ve lost the charm,” where the tense does not fit the intended general account. The final sentence is incomplete in structure after “if we constructe.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms, articles and punctuation, especially when joining clauses.

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