Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is true that increasing population at many countries need new homes for everone. Although some people believe that making home at village is a best decision ,others argue to save countryside atmosphere. I believe that making home at contryside is a negative effect for any countries. This essay discuss my reasons of my opinion.

To begin with, making more homes at village increase pollution. If people start to live in countryside so they use car and increase air pollution, they use plastics and making any other wastages which increase soil pollution and water pollution ,as a result cutivation get affected and famers should start struggle to cutivate more crops. For example, farming need to quite and pollution less atmophere for better production, oherwise farmer use more fertilizer to grow their seeds as a result it should negative effect on human life.

On the other hand, governments make a law to there citizens for restrict country side as a living. Governments should plan to make planing city for there citizen to solve housing crises, they make towers and a small city where pleple are living with all facility. For example, few decads ago Delhi face same problem of housing crises so they make many plaing city near by city boder so mass population move there and they travel inside city for there job and education.Hence, governments make new city to protect countryside.

In conclusion, many people need home to live there lives peacefully but space for for making home is challenge, while some move to country side for live there lives, I believe that governments make proper plan to save country side by making small city and planing city where mass population stay together.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you oppose building homes in the countryside and favour planned urban development. You address the main issue with relevant reasons, including pollution’s effects on farming and the possibility of creating planned cities, and the Delhi example helps make your proposal more concrete. This meets the task’s central requirements. However, the pollution argument is more fully explained than the alternative housing plan, and some links need clearer support—for instance, how residents’ car use would necessarily increase or how the proposed cities would reduce pressure on rural land. Develop each reason with a more precise explanation or example, and make the comparison between housing needs and countryside protection more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present reasons, and a conclusion restates your position. Signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. Some connections, however, are mechanical or unclear. “On the other hand” suggests a contrasting view, but the paragraph actually develops your own solution; a phrase such as “A better approach would be” would fit more accurately. The long first body paragraph also moves quickly from car use to waste, farming, and fertilizer. Organise these points into a clearer cause-and-effect sequence, and use pronouns and linking phrases with more precise references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “soil pollution,” “housing crises,” “fertilizer,” and “mass population,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main arguments. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less clear. For example, “making home at village” and “save countryside atmosphere” do not express the intended ideas naturally; “cultivation” and “farmers” are also misspelled, and “planing city” is repeated. Aim to learn topic phrases as complete collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “rural development,” “urban housing,” and “agricultural land” would help you express the argument more clearly and flexibly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional and cause-and-effect forms such as “If people start to live in countryside…” and “as a result…”. This gives the response some structural variety, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, there are some recurring errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “increasing population … need” should use a singular verb, while “making more homes … increase” also needs subject–verb agreement. The opening sentence of the second body paragraph, “governments make a law to there citizens for restrict…,” is difficult to follow because its grammatical relationships are unclear. Practise accurate clause formation and check articles, plurals, and verb forms when editing.

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