Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is believed by some people that protect the countrside areas instead of building new houses.While there are various reasons of protecting the rural areas ,will be disscussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

To embark with,Why countryside areas should be protected?Firstly, more plantation area.To explain it, if people leave the more space empty in rural areas ,they can grow more and more tree ,vegetables,crops for improve the status of argriculutre.As a result, they will get the source of income ,because in most the countires people depend on the agriculture for fullfill their daily needs.For example, A survey was conducted by the Agriculture university in Ludhiana in Punjab in 2025,showed at more than 75%people in India depend on the agriculture for earning money.

However.it is more advantangeous to use this space for building education centres,hospitals and many other sector.To elaborate it,If govenment establish the schools,colleges.universities in the countryside area then people can get the better education facilities near to thier houses istead of of going outside.Thus ,these places can increase the job oppertunities in these areas and reduce the litrecy rate in the world.Additionally,people in countryside areas have lack of modern thinking that's why they do not prefer to send the women in far places ,that's why women cannot get the better opportunities.

To sum up,it is clear that protecting the countryside area is better than than building new house because they can use it for farming and establishing better sectors like schools,colleges,universities,hospitals and many more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a relevant opinion in the conclusion, favouring protection of the countryside, and support it with points about farming and services such as schools and hospitals. However, the position is not clear throughout: the second body paragraph argues that countryside land should be used for development, which conflicts with your stated preference unless you explain how this fits your view. The farming point is supported with an example, but the claim about women’s opportunities and the benefits of new facilities need clearer explanation. The response also falls six words short of the required minimum. State your position in the introduction and develop reasons that consistently support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly group related points: farming is discussed first, followed by education and other services. Basic signposting such as “Firstly,” “However” and “To sum up” helps readers follow the structure. However, the overall progression is weakened by the shift from protecting countryside land to building facilities there, without explaining the relationship between these positions. Some links are mechanical or unclear, and the long sentence about women’s opportunities repeats “that’s why.” Use topic sentences that make each paragraph’s purpose clear, and connect examples and explanations more directly to your central opinion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “rural areas,” “source of income,” “job opportunities” and “education facilities.” These choices show an attempt to discuss agriculture and community development. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to read, such as “more plantation area,” “reduce the litrecy rate” and “lack of modern thinking.” Repetition of “countryside areas” and lists of facilities also restrict variety. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling and natural combinations of words; for example, describe land as being used for “agricultural production” rather than “plantation area.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex structures, including conditional phrasing (“if people leave the more space empty…”) and cause-and-effect sentences beginning “As a result” and “because.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence formation, verb forms, articles, plurals and punctuation. For instance, “It is believed by some people that protect…” lacks a complete clause, while “if government establish” needs a correctly formed subject and verb. Several sentences run together or are separated incorrectly, which makes the relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles and punctuation before adding more complex clauses.

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