Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Owing to the problems which a growing construction of new houses cause for the cities. While it is thought that key solution is to build homes in the countryside, others opine that it needs be protected from this growing trend. I agree that it is necessary to protect small towns from this over constructing culture, but building good infrastructure also be taken into consideration.

To start with, small towns offer peaceful environment to live better retirement life or slow life. This means is that people want to have ecofriendly nature nearby and live less disturbing life there. Bulding homes there invites numerous problmes, ranging from growing number of population to more polution. More vehicles on the roads with growing number of people, which reduced the quality of life people were enjoying there. As a results, it is undoubtedly true that people might affected by building more houses in the small towns.

Moreover, majority of the town population rely on agriculture and small businesses there, which affect in devastating ways. Firstly, agriculture land reduces as the number of houses build there and, owing to that people might suffer from financially. As a result, agriculture sector gets affect and it puts heavy burden on authorities to import more and more items as productions decreases. Therefore, the rate of food goes to sky and invites numerous problems like inflation and create competitive market for the people.

In conclusion, I think the best approach to tackle this problems is to redesign the structure of cities by building apartments and constructing less houses in the small towns to protect environmental culture and agriculture support.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you support protecting small towns and the countryside, while acknowledging that infrastructure and housing needs must also be considered. The response addresses the question with relevant reasons, including pollution, pressure on roads, loss of agricultural land, and possible effects on food prices. These points support your view and show the beginnings of a broader discussion. However, the infrastructure point in the introduction is not developed, and the proposed solution—redesigning cities and building apartments—is stated briefly without explaining how it would meet housing demand. The links from reduced agricultural production to imports and inflation also need clearer support. Developing these points with a specific example would make the argument more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion that restates your view. Sequencing phrases such as “To start with,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. The overall progression is understandable, but some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “This means is that” does not clearly connect the peaceful character of small towns to residents’ preferences, while “As a results” introduces a consequence without a precise reference. The second body paragraph also moves quickly from farmland loss to imports, food prices, and competition. Use clearer cause-and-effect links and refer explicitly to the idea each pronoun or transition represents.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “infrastructure,” “agriculture,” “population,” “pollution,” and “inflation,” which helps communicate the main concerns. There are also some less common expressions, such as “heavy burden on authorities.” However, inaccurate word choice, collocation, and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less natural: “over constructing culture,” “slow life,” and “the rate of food goes to sky” are unclear or awkward, while “Bulding,” “problmes,” and “polution” contain spelling errors. Aim for precise, conventional phrasing and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe “pressure to import food” and “rising food prices” rather than using the current expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “which,” “as,” and “owing to,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in longer sentences. The opening fragment, “Owing to the problems which a growing construction of new houses cause for the cities,” is not a complete sentence, and “While it is thought that key solution…” is also left without a clear main clause. Other examples include “it needs be protected,” “people might affected,” and “agriculture sector gets affect,” where verb forms or sentence patterns are faulty. Work on complete sentence construction, subject–verb agreement, articles, and passive forms. Shorter, accurately controlled sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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