Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is an on going issue about new homes are needed in many places, and countryside is the only place that is available. Some people believe that protecting the countryside is more important than to building a new building and houses there. In this essay I will talk about my own opinion and relevant example from my own knowledge or experience.

To begin with, countryside is a place that we must preserve to our future young ones to see or witness the beauty of our countryside. Government should emplement a rule not to touch or build a house in this particular places. They should also improve the parks like, putting signage with a note and sayings about protecting our nature, putting some trash bins or garbage can to the people who is visiting the park for them to trow their rubish so that it will not scatered everywhere, renuvating all the damaged facitities in the countryside like C.R., water fountain and many more.

On the otherhand, building homes in countryside will cause a negative effect on our community and also in nature. One example is the garbage increase in country side, people will just trow there garbage anywhere, it will cause an air polution because of their cars and rubish, we will also have a water polution because they will connect their water waste on the rivers and oceans.

In conclusion, Countryside must be protected so that the future generations will witness the beauty of nature. However, building houses in the area will cause a damage on our mother nature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you support protecting the countryside, and the conclusion repeats this view. You also give relevant reasons, including preserving natural beauty and avoiding pollution from cars and waste. However, the response addresses the housing need only briefly, and it does not explain how this need might be met if countryside development is restricted. Some points are also under-developed: for example, the claim that residents will put rubbish anywhere is asserted rather than supported, and the suggestions about park facilities do not directly explain how they protect rural land. Develop fewer ideas with clearer explanation and a specific example to address the issue more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The progression from preserving nature to the possible harms of building is generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” signal the stages of the argument. However, the first body paragraph combines several different suggestions—rules, signs, bins and facility repairs—without clearly linking them to the central argument. Some connections are also mechanical, and the contrast between the two body paragraphs could be made more precise. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and support it before moving to the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “preserve,” “future generations,” “air pollution” and “water pollution,” so the main ideas are understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the reader pause. Examples include “on going issue,” “building a new building,” “garbage increase,” and “connect their water waste on the rivers.” Spelling errors such as “emplement,” “trow,” “rubish” and “scatered” are also noticeable. Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling carefully; using accurate phrases such as “untreated wastewater entering rivers” would make your argument clearer and more formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts often contain errors. For example, “There is an on going issue about new homes are needed” combines sentence patterns incorrectly, while “more important than to building” uses an incorrect comparison structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence construction, as in “countryside is a place that we must preserve to our future young ones” and “people who is visiting.” These errors recur and can make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise building accurate sentences with “that” clauses and comparisons, and check subject–verb agreement and article use.

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