Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the recent world, constuction of new building have become a topic to debate,Shelter is a basic neccesary to live. Housing have become a significant issue for many people, in many places new houses are required to live. However, Countryside is the only space available for constructing buildings. perphaps some indiviual believe that it is essential to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

but in my opinion we should let the builders build the new homes to avoid people being homeless.

On the first hand, in canada as we all know that the population of our country is loo low, as our new generations are not opting to be pregnant and deliver babies so, the number of the population is decreasing day by day. Hence goverment have taken up preventive method to increase the pollution by immigrating people across the world and this method will also help in socioeconomic mobility of our country.

On the other hand, although we are this method have benefited us by increased in population and econamic stability but it comes with major issue about housing , Government should make an arragement for place people can live comfortablily with their famalies, so we have to consider countryside to build new homes for new immigrant so that people do not live our country.

To conclude, shelter is a basic neccessity to live. To over come the problem of pollution and to increase country's economy we must allow government to build houses by countryside. This facility facinates many people across the globe to immigrant to our country as student , job seekers and though permanant resident.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear opinion that homes should be built in the countryside, and you connect this to housing needs and immigration in Canada. However, the response only partially develops the central issue of balancing new housing with protecting rural land. The population and immigration discussion takes up much of the argument, while the effects of building on the countryside and possible ways to limit environmental harm are not explored. The claim that population is decreasing because people are not choosing to have children is also asserted without support. Develop two directly relevant reasons, explain each one, and add a specific example. The response meets the required length; the 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. However, progression within the argument is uneven: the first body paragraph focuses on population and immigration, and the next shifts to housing without clearly explaining how the points connect. Linking phrases such as “On the first hand” and “On the other hand” signal contrast, but the second paragraph begins “although we are this method,” making the relationship difficult to follow. Some ideas are repeated in the conclusion rather than brought together. Use topic sentences that directly state each reason, then connect claims with clear references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “housing,” “population,” “immigrating,” and “socioeconomic mobility,” and the reader can generally understand your position. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to interpret. For example, “increase the pollution” appears to mean increase the population, while “so that people do not live our country” seems to express the opposite of your intended point. There are also repeated errors such as “neccessary,” “goverment,” and “econamic.” Check the meaning and spelling of key terms, and choose precise phrases for the effects of housing development and countryside protection.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrast clause beginning “although” and a reason introduced by “so that.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Housing have become,” “government have taken,” and the fragment-like opening “In the recent world, constuction of new building have become a topic to debate,Shelter…” The sentence beginning “although we are this method have benefited us” is especially hard to parse. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating complete sentences with appropriate punctuation before adding more clauses.

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