Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Home is very crucial in ones life , because person want place where there is more freedom rather than rented property where there is some restriction and house is one thing where he or she can design the house by their own choice because he is gonna live there throughout his life there and create lifelong memories .

Build house on countryside is good choice because there are a lot of benefits of it , it had more space , where adult especially adolescent has more area where there can play freely more propably, human being can own dog also thats good for person and house security where it is risky to pet them in cities, one can have more privacy out of city especially if one is celebrity,because there should be less population and people there , where people are usually busy in there activities on land which requires more care and they dont care about celebrity .

Secondly its good to buy home there town in because its less expensive comapare to city , further more people can afford house also there in todays competitative world and its hard to buy living area in city from your hard earn money from blood and sweat, thirdly yu can grow fresh vegetables also there which is good overall well being ,as it said health is wealth.

In my opinion countryside is better choice because there living human feel more safe from todays cruel and fake world because nobody wants yu to better than themselves , moreover trust is dangerous game now a days.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the topic but lacks a formal structure and a clear, consistent position. While you argue in favor of building in the countryside, the arguments are somewhat disjointed and rely on personal anecdotes (e.g., celebrities, owning a dog) rather than broader societal or environmental considerations. The conclusion is abrupt and introduces irrelevant points about 'trust' and 'fake worlds' that do not directly answer the prompt regarding housing needs versus environmental protection. To improve, ensure your main ideas are directly linked to the prompt and developed with more logical, objective reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between and within them is often disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'Secondly' and 'further more', but they are often used incorrectly or with poor punctuation. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between 'adolescents' and 'celebrities' feels abrupt. The lack of clear topic sentences makes it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Improving your use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a single, clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and non-standard collocations, such as 'living area in city from your hard earn money from blood and sweat' and 'trust is dangerous game'. While you attempt to use some descriptive language, the word choice is often imprecise. To reach a higher band, focus on using more academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for a formal essay. Avoid informal or overly dramatic expressions like 'cruel and fake world'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'person want place'), article usage (e.g., 'Build house on countryside'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, which makes them difficult to parse. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and struggle with complex ones. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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