Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the contemporary world, demand of housing is increasing significantly. It is often believed that in some areas demand of houses is required and the only space available to built is countryside areas. Some individuals argue that it is more important to protect countryside area instead of building houses. This essay will intend why it is important to protect country side area and how to solve the problem of rising housing demand. The reasons to support the statement are discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.

Countryside area is the only place where people can relax their mind without hearing the noises of the horns. If this area will be used for building residential area then there will be no any place where people can enjoy themselves after the hectic day.

To resolve the issue of building houses. The factories that are not in use can be removed and new apartments could to constructed to meet the needs of the humans. By doing this that area can be used and it will be neat and clean which will become useful. Apart from this government can construct the apartments in the form of high rise building which will attract the people and accomplish the needs of the people without using the countryside area.

To conclude, countryside is the only place where people can rejuvenate the optimistic energy as it is the area apart from the city. Needs of the new houses can be resolved by removing the unused factories and constructing the high rise apartment building. This will not only solve the problem of demand of housing but it will also covert the unused land into used land.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against building on the countryside and suggesting alternatives. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention the importance of relaxation and suggest using brownfield sites (unused factories), the arguments lack depth and specific examples. For instance, the point about 'rejuvenating optimistic energy' is a bit vague. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detailed reasoning or real-world examples, such as the environmental impact of urban sprawl or the economic benefits of urban regeneration. The essay covers all parts of the task, but the development is basic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. There is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs and the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive. For example, the transition 'To resolve the issue of building houses' is a sentence fragment, and the connection between sentences could be smoother. You rely on simple linking words like 'Apart from this' and 'To conclude'. To improve, try using a wider variety of cohesive devices, such as 'consequently', 'furthermore', or 'in light of this', to better connect your ideas within and between paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. You frequently use basic terms like 'area', 'place', and 'needs'. Phrases like 'rejuvenate the optimistic energy' and 'covert the unused land' (likely meant 'convert') show an attempt to use more sophisticated language, but the collocations are not always natural. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'demand of housing' instead of 'demand for housing'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to urban planning and environmental protection, and ensure you are using words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'demand of houses is required' (awkward phrasing), 'only space available to built' (should be 'build'), 'no any place' (should be 'no place'), and 'could to constructed' (should be 'could be constructed'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb forms in passive constructions, and proofreading for small errors like missing articles or incorrect prepositions.

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