Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is becoming a trend in recent years, where so many individual now erect new houses in the rural area while others argue that these areas should be protected.

There are so many reasons why people are now moving to the countryside, one of the major reason for this is noise pollution. People are resorting to quiet environment this is because the urban areas are always busy, sounds from motorcycle, industrial machines and many others can be disturbing.

moreover, privacy is another area of concern. the need to have a relaxing home after a stressful day in the office have pose a serious concern resulting in moving to the rural area for settlement.

Despite the need for enhance better life, there is also need to make reservation to protect wildlife. Some wild animals are quiet shy and cannot stay around the busy environments. this can be done to avoid the extinction of certain animals like Deer, wild pigs and so many other

it is becoming a common practice to make provision for areas to have a farmland. this area can be reserved to provide enough land for agricultural crops. so many counties like Nigeria have some portion of land allocated to farming

in conclusion, while other believe that countryside should be used for housing, i suggest that need to quench hunger by farming and forest reserve for wildlife

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address the topic, the arguments are underdeveloped. For instance, you mention noise pollution and privacy as reasons for moving to the countryside, but these points lack depth and specific examples. Furthermore, the conclusion is abrupt and does not fully synthesize your position. To improve, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by abrupt transitions and sentence-level errors. While you use some cohesive devices like 'moreover' and 'in conclusion', the connection between ideas is sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, the transition between the need for housing and the need for wildlife protection is quite sudden. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs needs to be more cohesive to guide the reader effectively through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'erect new houses' and 'quiet environment'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'make reservation' (likely meaning 'preserve') and 'quench hunger' (which is idiomatic but used incorrectly here). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to urban planning and environmental conservation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('one of the major reason', 'the need... have pose'), missing articles, and punctuation errors. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. For instance, 'It is becoming a trend in recent years, where so many individual now erect...' contains multiple errors. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles to improve your accuracy.

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