Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.
What is your opinion about this?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Urbanization plays an indispnsible role for the holistic development of any city. However, some people refuse to build new living colony in the village as they wants to protect such areas from getting it occupied with huge constructions. I have mixed opinion on this matter as urbanization has equal importance as saving the country side.
To begin with, due to advancement in technology all sector growing rapidly which creates a plathora of opportunity in various fields such as: Engineering, Retail and Fashion etc. Additionally, more commercial buildings are required to expand new businesses. Because of this government is focusing more on countryside to develop any new projects as it is more convenient to build new homes for mass immigrants as they migrated for their better future. For an instance, Adani- India's biggest comapny recently started their new thermal power plant in Rampur village which took thousands of acers of fertile land from farmers to build colony nearby the plant.
On the other side, global warming is a major concern in this modern era, so, government should not neglect the other people who is opposing the modernization in the rural area. Moreover, they should focus on sustainable solution which will not impact the countryside. Counrtyside has lots of greenery which is also part of our eco system and must re
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you present a clear position, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. The arguments regarding urbanization and environmental protection are relevant but remain under-developed due to the lack of length. To improve, you must ensure you fully expand on your points and provide a proper conclusion. The example of the Adani power plant is a good attempt at supporting your argument, but the overall task is not fully addressed because the essay is unfinished.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay shows a basic logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a clear attempt at a balanced view. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Additionally', and 'On the other side' to signal transitions. However, the abrupt ending disrupts the overall flow and coherence of the piece. Paragraphing is present, but the lack of a concluding paragraph makes the essay feel incomplete. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are fully linked and that the essay has a clear, logical progression from start to finish.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'holistic development', 'urbanization', and 'sustainable solution'. However, there are several spelling errors ('indispnsible', 'plathora', 'comapny', 'acers', 'Counrtyside') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'living colony' and 'getting it occupied'. These errors do not necessarily impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on proofreading for spelling accuracy and expanding your use of collocations to sound more natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('some people... wants', 'other people who is opposing') and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of colons and commas. While the meaning is generally clear, these frequent errors indicate a lack of control over complex structures. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentences are punctuated correctly to enhance readability.
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