Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In our country always need to the stay home with best location. Generally, People not accept the situation for the finance and accommodation place. Like most people not guide for the best place good for the homes. some spaces go more look wise for the great connection with the nature.

Nowadays, We are thinking for the future. In future Like so many changes for the countryside. Most beautiful asset is home. In our country, people very needy for the good space home with best location. Its a Most important for the our life. If many places like go for the near by transport, job, also possibility of the good will conduct. Need more habitual for the nature and connect with neighbors for the more then years.

When, I believe that people also think for the protect the countryside because all professional and personal affect like near location for the temple, job, Colleges, Schools. In transportation like Bus, Train, Airport, That is the reason for the more important to protect the countryside build homes.

I always both side but generally people countryside safe for the health and allocation for the monotonous life. Very habitual life affect more current located for the financial and precious find out the way. people are not manageable for growth and also disconnect with nature it is for bad luck to his Migration. I am very connect this things because currently I lived In India, but My families live in Dubai. So it is very hectic situation in my life.

I Suggest my opinion For the some reason affect the important daily routine, but situation always seen the proper give your time for the grand build in Ideas think logically and domestics or countryside.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the dilemma of building new homes in the countryside versus protecting rural spaces, but the development of ideas is severely hampered by poor clarity and disjointed reasoning. The writer attempts to express a personal opinion and touches upon factors such as transportation, job proximity, and health, but these points are fragmented and often confusingly expressed. For instance, statements such as 'I always both side but generally people countryside safe for the health' lack the clear elaboration required for higher bands. The position throughout the essay is difficult to follow, leading to an under-developed treatment of the topic. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors, where the response addresses the task only minimally and ideas are insufficiently developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are major weaknesses in this essay. The information and ideas are not arranged in a coherent manner, making the progression of thought very difficult to follow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical sequencing and clear thematic development. Transitions between sentences are generally absent or abrupt, as seen in the sudden shift from discussing future changes to personal transportation in the second paragraph. Furthermore, cohesive devices are either misused or entirely missing, leading to a disjointed reading experience. Pronoun referencing and substitution are frequently unclear, hindering the overall flow. These characteristics place the response firmly at Band 4, as ideas are not organized coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and frequently inappropriate for the context. Words such as 'needy,' 'habitual,' and 'allocation' are used incorrectly or in unnatural collocations, such as 'people very needy for the good space home.' The range of vocabulary is severely limited, forcing the writer to reuse simple terms like 'people,' 'home,' and 'countryside' repeatedly. There are numerous word choice and word formation errors that frequently strain the reader's understanding, such as 'grand build in Ideas think logically and domestics or countryside.' While there are occasional correct usages of common words, the persistent lexical inaccuracies and strain on the reader mean the response falls below Band 5, best reflecting Band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the text. The response consists almost entirely of simple, frequently fragmented sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences result in severe grammatical distortion and ungrammatical strings of words, such as 'If many places like go for the near by transport, job, also possibility of the good will conduct.' There are constant errors in basic verb forms, prepositions, and word order, such as 'In our country always need to the stay home' and 'My families live in Dubai. So it is very hectic situation in my life.' Punctuation is also erratic and fails to guide the reader. Because errors are frequent, pervasive, and frequently distort meaning, the grammar fits the Band 4 level.

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