Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The population increasing day by day that the reason new house demand increasing every day more and more. At the time all city area is fully conjected and they dont have space to making a building.

firstly, I belives it is important to protect the county side and I can not build new homes because somepeople want to live a spaces house and peacfull life with fresh air. someone do not like a noise polluation. sameone want to leave on safe and hathy enviromemt Secondly,If they agree to bulid a new homes they make sure they live with lot of polluation like air, noise, water etc.. and life is full

of stressed.

however, if county side spaces are allowed to build a new house we cannot use the land for farming and lost of effects on country economy. for example right now country side houses are cheaper and spaces. country side people have owm fram so they can produce evey year lot of seasonal fruit and vegetable so

people can eat healthy also they have dairy fram so

child drink fresh milk.morever it aslo effect on global warming. finally it also effect on our river so we can not drink pure water.

In conculation country side have beutifuel fram, river and spaces house. It is more concated to the nature and sometime if we are borrowed our hustle - bustel city life so we can go there and relax. if we do not have any palce like this we are tried after some movement and our daily life as fully streesed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear opinion that the countryside should be protected from new housing developments due to environmental, agricultural, and lifestyle reasons. The writer covers both the demand for homes and the importance of preserving open spaces, fulfilling the requirements of General Training Task 2. However, the ideas are presented in a somewhat limited and repetitive manner without deep development. For example, points regarding pollution, farming, and mental relaxation are touched upon briefly rather than fully extended with specific real-world examples. Consequently, the task response aligns best with Band 5 descriptors, as the position is clear but the ideas remain under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay attempts some organisation with basic cohesive markers such as 'firstly', 'Secondly', 'however', and 'In conculation'. However, the overall progression is disrupted by frequent structural and mechanical issues. Paragraphing is attempted, but sentences within paragraphs are often run-on or lack appropriate logical linking. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical nature of the cohesive devices makes the flow disjointed. There is also a lack of smooth transitions between the discussion of urban overcrowding, countryside lifestyles, and agricultural impacts. These features are characteristic of Band 4 Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical resource is basic and limited, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally strain the reader's understanding. Words are often misspelled or misused, such as 'conjected' instead of 'congested', 'county side' instead of 'countryside', 'peacfull', 'polluation', 'hathy', 'enviromemt', 'conculation', and 'beutifuel'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'hustle - bustel', but inaccuracies in spelling and collocation are prevalent throughout the text. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, placing it firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of structures and frequent, persistent errors. Simple sentences frequently contain structural omissions, such as missing verbs ('The population increasing day by day that the reason...') and missing articles. Attempts at complex sentences are almost always faulty, leading to confusion in meaning (e.g., 'if county side spaces are allowed to build a new house we cannot use the land...'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic throughout the text. Because errors are frequent and constantly impede fluency and clarity, the writing reflects the Band 4 descriptors for grammar.

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