Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Building new homes city or countryside

In many places , new homes are needed ,but the only space available for building them is in the countryside or city .In my opinion homes are good to my countryside ,because alredy most of the cityes builded with comersicial offices, hotels big companies and aprtements .Here is more traffic problems we are facing now a days ten minutes drive is taking 20 minutes.And pollution also increased ,due that air pollutions peopels are suffering from diseases like lungs ,breathing and skin .

according to me homes or new companies any big apartments good to build in countryside ,one of the way to reduce pollution and traffic ,Due to heavy traffic facing accidents ,recently one of my friend got car crashed ,Thank god he is not in serious condition.

my conclusion according to my knowledge and expirence better to any construction s are good to strat in countryside .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by discussing whether new homes should be built in the countryside or the city, presenting a position that construction should happen in the countryside to alleviate city congestion. However, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping at only 154 words. Because of this severe length penalty, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting detail and examples. The task is addressed only partially due to the restricted development. Based on these descriptors, the task achievement is marked at Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text shows some basic organizational structure with a loose introduction, body, and conclusion, but the overall progression of ideas is hindered by a lack of proper paragraphing and cohesive devices. Sentences are run together awkwardly, such as using commas incorrectly in places like 'new homes are needed ,but the only space available'. Paragraph breaks are missing or incorrectly placed, resulting in a single block of text for the main body. Referencing is weak and unclear at times. Cohesion is inadequate and mechanical throughout the short response. This aligns with the Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, utilizing words like 'homes', 'city', 'countryside', and 'traffic'. There are frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and word formation, such as 'cityes', 'omersicial', 'aprtements', 'peopels', and 'expirence'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic thoughts, but the numerous inaccuracies strain the reader. This performance fits squarely into the Band 4 descriptor category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex structures that are faulty, leading to frequent errors that distort meaning and impede comprehension. Examples include 'homes are good to my countryside ,because alredy most of the cityes builded with comersicial offices' and 'due that air pollutions peopels are suffering'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic. These persistent and major grammatical errors restrict the score to Band 4.0.

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