Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The Rapid growth of the cities has brought economic benefits but also have significant drawbacks and urban challenges. With the increasing number of individual around the cities the society is moving towards the countryside to build their new houses and town. While some people believe that it has devastating effect on the outskirts lifestyle of the town, whereas the some of them are in favour of building homes in the countryside. This essay will display the downside of building new home in the countryside.

Countryside is the lifeline of the society, it is the major source of food, grains and dairy for the survival of human life on this planet. While, demolishing this area and building new home for the society will lead to scarcity of the food product among the peoples and which can give rise to the economic problems and inflation around the country. For example, In Mumbai recently the big chunk of countryside has been transferred to the big township which had lead to rise of the food product in that township as they had to transported from the other province. This change in just one city has lead to rise in many cost for the people same if it happen on larger scale around the world can lead to devastating experiences for the society.

Adding to this, the outskirt area not only the source of the food and dairy but also provide a very relaxing and different lifestyle from the city life. There is always a hustle bustle in the city lifestyle whereas in the countryside it is peaceful and calm. The atmosphere of the countryside is fresh and vibrant in nature and people visit to this specific are to experience a relaxing and peaceful lifestyle. For instance, according to a survey in Toronto, 65% of people say they prefer to visit countryside to spend their weekend and experience a relaxing and a different life style of human nature.

In the conclusion, despite of having a shortage of homes in the cities or town and does lead to solution to building new homes in countryside area. As destroying all outskirts will have a serious consequence for humans lifeline and their future generations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you argue against building homes in the countryside, and both body paragraphs give relevant reasons. The points about food production and the countryside’s value as a peaceful place to visit address the issue, while the Mumbai and Toronto examples help support them. This meets the task well, though the two reasons are not developed equally: the tourism point is explained mainly through a general description and survey claim, rather than showing in detail why protecting that lifestyle should outweigh the need for housing. The conclusion also introduces a concession about housing shortages but expresses the proposed solution unclearly. To strengthen the response further, explain how housing needs could be met without sacrificing rural land and make the final position more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. The progression from food supply to the countryside’s recreational value is logical, and phrases such as “Adding to this” signal a new point. However, some linking is mechanical or confusing. The opening uses “While” and “whereas” together, and the conclusion’s “despite of … and does lead to solution” makes the relationship between the ideas difficult to follow. References such as “this change” and “this specific area” could also be more precise. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports; this would make the overall progression easier to follow without relying on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “economic benefits,” “scarcity,” “inflation,” “hustle bustle,” and “future generations.” These choices show an effort to discuss consequences beyond simply stating an opinion. However, inaccurate word choice and collocation are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning less natural: “outskirts lifestyle,” “food product,” “big chunk of countryside,” and “different lifestyle of human nature” are unclear or awkward in context. There are also word-form and spelling issues, such as “individual” where a plural is needed and “are” for “area.” Aim for precise, natural combinations rather than adding more elaborate wording. For example, use established phrases such as “rural way of life” and “food prices” to express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “While” and “whereas,” and the main argument is generally understandable. However, control is inconsistent: several sentences contain errors in agreement, articles, plurals, or clause structure. For example, “The Rapid growth … has brought … but also have” shifts incorrectly from singular to plural agreement, while “Countryside is the lifeline” needs an article. The sentence beginning “In the conclusion, despite of having…” is also structurally incomplete, making the final point hard to interpret. Some punctuation choices, especially commas joining complete clauses, further affect clarity. Practise building accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that agreement remains consistent.

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