Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In many nations, people need new houses to live, however there is less land in towns so only place available is rural areas. A few individuals think that it is neccessary to prevent the farmlands and new homes should not be built there. In this essay i am agree with this statement due to some reasons which i will explain in upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with, there are many reasons why countryside area should not be used for building home. First and foremost, it may put impact on environment. To explain it more, they need to clear the land if they want build house there. During this process they will cut the trees, grass etc, due to this not only co2 level can increase but also i can be harmful for the creature, who are living there. For example: In India, due to the population people are using their farmland to make homes which is putting impact on the climate. As a result, it will incline the chance of global warming.

Moreover, it can be harmful for farming. To justify it more, as in rural area there are more farm land. So if that land will be used for the house than it would be hard to produce that much food as farmers are producing now. For example: In India the Punjab state is the one of biggest producer of rice but from last few years there is decline in that because of the farmland used for building and roads. Hence, it can put the impact on all our the nation.

In conculsion, although the housing is the problem in thesedays but i don think so using rural area to build the homes is great idea. Government can make highrise buildings and also they can encourage public to share their housing like giving rooms on rent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you agree that countryside should be protected, and you give two relevant reasons—environmental damage and reduced farmland—supported by examples from India. This addresses the question and gives the response a clear central argument. The environmental point is explained through tree removal and possible effects on wildlife and climate, while the farming point links land loss to food production. However, some support is asserted rather than fully established: the Punjab example would be stronger with clearer explanation of how housing and roads have caused the reported decline. The conclusion offers alternatives, but these could be connected more explicitly to your argument. To strengthen the response further, develop each example with precise cause-and-effect reasoning and explain why your proposed alternatives are practical.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “To begin with,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the progression, and each body paragraph has a recognisable main focus. This gives the essay coherent organisation. Some linking is mechanical, however, with repeated frames such as “To explain it more,” “To justify it more,” and “For example.” A few connections are also unclear, particularly the move from the Punjab example to the broad claim about the whole nation. Use a wider range of natural transitions and make references explicit; for instance, clarify what “that” refers to in “that much food” and connect each example directly to the reason it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “environment,” “farmland,” “global warming,” “producer,” and “highrise buildings.” These choices show awareness of the subject and allow the reader to understand your position. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making meaning less natural: “put impact on environment,” “incline the chance,” and “share their housing” are examples. Spelling errors such as “neccessary” and “conculsion” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of natural phrases for discussing land use and consequences, and check spelling and word forms. More precise expressions would make your argument clearer and more fluent without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional and cause-and-effect structures such as “if they want build house there” and “if that land will be used for the house.” This shows an effort to express relationships between ideas, but the complex forms are often faulty, and errors occur across the response. Examples include “people need new houses to live” (missing a suitable construction), “I am agree,” “they want build,” and “if that land will be used … than it would be hard.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in the opening sentence joined with “however.” Practise accurate verb patterns and conditional forms, and proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb. Greater control of these structures would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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