Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In current era, land is down camper to people need, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside.Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. This eassy we disscus availableboth view and give a opinion.

on the one hand, every one attret to city life, so in a city do not have a space for build a new home. land are not available in a city, that is a reasone people convet to new home in a village, but the countryside is not a safe people also know about the countryside is our peacefull atmosphere. people live in countryside, so it is a lost of beauty and view. countryside land is available for farmer do for agriculture and the countryside is only one land avaliable for a agriculture. countrysid include a new hompeoplee so environment is a polluted.

on the second view of this topic, in the city do not have a space to bulid a new home, so day by day city land decraced camper to village, so people do not have a land and live a city that is a reason people convert to a village land and build a new home.

In counled, city life is good, but it is not camper to village life. I think people should be more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You give a clear opinion in the conclusion: “people should be more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.” You also mention relevant concerns, including the countryside’s peaceful atmosphere, its beauty and its agricultural use. However, the response does not adequately develop the reasons for your position, and the discussion of the opposing view is unclear and repetitive. The opening says you will discuss “both view,” but the body does not explain the benefits of building homes in the countryside in a clear, supported way. The response is 198 words, so it is 52 words below the 250-word minimum; 45 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each main reason with an explanation or a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “on the one hand” and “In counled” signal stages in the discussion. This gives the reader some sense of structure. However, the ideas within paragraphs are difficult to follow, and the relationship between points is often unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from city space to village homes, then to safety, beauty, farming and pollution without explaining how these points connect. The second body paragraph largely repeats the claim that city land is unavailable. Use one clear main idea per paragraph, connect each supporting sentence to it, and make the contrast between the two views explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “peacefull atmosphere,” “agriculture,” “environment” and “protect the countryside.” These choices show an effort to discuss environmental and land-use issues. However, the range is basic and many spelling and word-choice errors make meaning difficult to recover, as in “land is down camper,” “people convet,” and “countrysid include a new hompeoplee.” Some phrases also do not express the intended idea clearly, such as “the countryside is not a safe people.” Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations. More precise wording would help you explain the effects of housing development and the value of rural land.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures with reasons, for example, “so in a city do not have a space for build a new home.” However, sentence patterns are very limited, and errors in sentence formation, articles, agreement and verb forms frequently make the message hard to understand. Examples include “land are not available,” “people live in countryside,” and “I think people should be more important to protect.” Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly in the first body paragraph. Practise forming accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add clauses using “because,” “although” and “so.” Check articles and verb forms, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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