Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there.

What is your opinion about this?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

protect for vegetation ecosystem pollusion increase

cities areas Outskirts

Far- Flung areas are the last option to fulfill the requirement of new residential construction in many countries. While some poeple argue that the protection of outskits are paramount rather than build new house in that areas, I also believe the same way because they provide us farming opportunities and mental health.

On the one hand, those part of land are primary source of farming and vegetasion, without which servival of individuals is not possible. They deliver the dairy products, fruits, and vegetables to the renowned stores in cities. Thus, it is clear if those areas are covered by new construction, it is not possible to have fresh grosierie

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your position is identifiable: you agree that countryside should be protected, and you give two relevant reasons—farming and mental health. The explanation that rural land supplies dairy products, fruit and vegetables is a useful start. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the mental-health reason is mentioned but not explained, and there is no example or developed discussion of the need for new homes or possible alternatives. The response is also 132 words below the required minimum, so it ends before your argument can be fully presented. To strengthen it, explain each reason with a specific example, consider the opposing need for housing, and conclude by clearly restating your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph states your opinion, followed by a paragraph beginning “On the one hand” that introduces a reason. Linking expressions such as “While,” “because,” and “Thus” show an effort to connect ideas. However, the argument does not progress beyond this initial point, and the final sentence is incomplete, leaving the relationship between the evidence and your conclusion unclear. The opening fragment, “protect for vegetation ecosystem pollusion increase,” also disrupts the flow. Use complete paragraphs for your position, each supporting reason, and a conclusion; connect each claim to an explanation or example, and avoid introducing a contrast marker unless you develop both sides.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “residential construction,” “farming opportunities,” “ecosystem,” and “mental health,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the usable range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “outskits,” “vegetasion,” “servival,” and “grosierie.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “renowned stores” does not clearly mean ordinary shops, and “Far-Flung areas” is not the most suitable phrase for countryside locations. Build a more accurate set of terms for rural land, housing and food supply, and check spelling carefully. Prefer familiar, precise collocations over ambitious wording that does not fit the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a complex opening sentence with “While,” and a cause-and-effect structure in “without which survival of individuals is not possible.” These show some willingness to use more than simple statements. However, the range remains limited, and errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms are frequent enough to make the reader work to follow the meaning. For example, “those part of land are” has a number-agreement problem, while “if those areas are covered by new construction, it is not possible…” does not clearly express the intended result. The final sentence is also unfinished. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, check singular/plural agreement and articles, and use full stops to separate ideas.

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