Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Lindsay,

I am writng this letter to seek your permission to spend six months in the head office of our company in Chicago. The prime reason behind this is that I want to learn about our customer service and merchandising policies and I feel there is no better place to learn about these areas than our head office where all the problems of all the stores in Canada and U.S.A. are solved.

I will ensure that my job duties are fulfilled while I am away. Since I will be working in the same company, but a different location, I will still be following the same work routine. I will only learn about the new areas during last few hours of my shift or as per the convinience of the staff there. Moreover, I will join all the necessary meetings of our office virtually and I assure you that my assignments will be submitted well in time.

I request you to grant me the permission for the same and forward this suggestion to our District Manager so that he can make necessary arrangements for my transfer for a brief period of six months. Looking forward to a hearing a positive response.

Best regards

Nandini Chandla

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You address all three requirements clearly: you explain that you want to learn about customer-service and merchandising policies, describe continuing your duties and attending meetings virtually, and ask Lindsay to seek the District Manager’s help. The purpose and request remain clear throughout, and the reasons are relevant to the proposed placement. The explanation of how your work would be managed is particularly useful, although it would be stronger with a little more practical detail—for example, who would cover any duties that cannot be done remotely, or how your workload would be coordinated across locations. Overall, the ideas are extended and supported, but a few details are stated generally rather than fully explained.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: you introduce the request and its rationale, explain how you would maintain your work, and finish by asking for assistance. Paragraphing supports these distinct purposes, and links such as “Since,” “Moreover,” and “so that” help show relationships between ideas. The sequence is easy to follow, though some transitions and phrasing feel slightly formulaic, particularly the repeated focus on permission and arrangements in the opening and closing. You could make the progression more natural by linking the proposed learning directly to how it would benefit your current role, then moving into a concise plan for maintaining responsibilities. The closing request could also connect more smoothly to the practical details already given.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of workplace vocabulary, including “customer service,” “merchandising policies,” “assignments,” and “necessary meetings,” and the meaning remains clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “prime reason” and “grant me the permission,” but these are not always natural in context. Spelling errors in “writng” and “convinience” show that written accuracy needs more checking, while “a hearing a positive response” is an awkward expression. To strengthen your range, favour precise, natural collocations over formal-sounding phrases: for example, say “main reason” and “approve my request.” Proofreading for spelling and idiomatic phrasing would make the letter more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the reason clause beginning “Since I will be working…” and the purpose clause “so that he can make necessary arrangements.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, and the conditional details are generally easy to follow. Some grammatical and punctuation issues remain: “I request you to grant me the permission” would be more naturally structured as “I ask you to grant permission,” and “Looking forward to a hearing a positive response” contains an unnecessary article and an awkward construction. The final sentence also needs a full stop. Continue practising accurate request structures and proofreading sentence endings; this would help you retain your range while improving control.

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