Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to request you about my work, I would like to work in the head office in another country for six months.

To begin with, as you know, our company is growing in all around the world. I have a good communication and leadership skills to address our every day work challenges. Therefore, head department has given an opportunity to work for head office.

Furthermore, if I talk about my work during that six months, I already discussed my upcoming task and client's meeting with my teammates . However, I will lead them through zoom meeting in weekends.

Lastly, I would appreciate it if you provide me that country's head office address and contact number. So, I can start my upcoming work as soon as possible and book tickets and accommodation.

I will look forward to hearing from you soon with positive reply.

Yours sincerely, Rahul Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by requesting a six-month placement and mentioning how you could continue working with your team. The reference to your communication and leadership skills also gives a reason for the move. However, the reason for wanting to work abroad is not fully explained: “our company is growing” and your skills do not clearly show what you hope to gain or contribute at the head office. The work-arrangement point is also unclear, since you mention leading meetings on weekends but do not explain how your regular duties or client meetings would be covered. Your final request focuses on an address and contact number rather than asking your manager to approve or help arrange the placement. Make each task point explicit and develop it with practical details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: it introduces the request, gives supporting information, describes a possible work arrangement, and closes with a request. Paragraphing and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the main points. This organisation is effective, though the linking phrases sometimes feel mechanical, and the connection between ideas is not always clear. For example, “Therefore, head department has given an opportunity” does not clearly follow from the preceding statement about company growth and your skills. The shift from explaining remote work to asking for an address and contact number also weakens progression. Use links that show the actual relationship between ideas, and make the final request connect directly to your manager’s role in arranging the placement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of task-relevant vocabulary, including “leadership skills,” “upcoming task,” “client’s meeting,” and “accommodation,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision. For instance, “request you about my work” does not express the request naturally, and “head department” is unclear. “In weekends” and “positive reply” are also awkward expressions. Aim for accurate workplace language and natural combinations, such as requesting a temporary transfer, coordinating with colleagues, and receiving approval. Check word forms and possessives as well, including “clients’ meetings” if you mean meetings with multiple clients.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional-style request (“I would appreciate it if…”) and a sentence beginning “Therefore.” The overall meaning is generally understandable, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms remain noticeable. The opening joins two independent clauses with a comma: “I am writing to request you about my work, I would like…”; separate these or connect them with an appropriate conjunction. Other examples include “I have a good communication and leadership skills,” where the article and plural agreement need attention, and “I already discussed,” which needs a suitable tense or auxiliary in this context. Review articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries, while continuing to practise varied sentence structures.

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