Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear manager,

I am writing to request you that i would like to spend six months in head office in another country regarding training in high position.

I would like to work in another country in the company's head office for six months because of that company provide opportunity to attend training and you would get higher position and training is absoluetly free. This would help me to build my future carrier.

I understand that you may have busy schedule, however I would appreciate that and I request you to give me a permission for my leave application becasue I will do all the work online if its possible or I will be done work earlier so this can not affect in my current job.

I want to request you to give me permission and I request you to arrange my accomodation or travelling if its possible.

Please let me know if you require any further informationnfrom me.

Thank you for your time.

your faithfully,

Liza

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain that you want training and career development, suggest working online or completing tasks early, and ask your manager to arrange travel or accommodation. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the ideas are relevant. However, some points are less fully developed than others. For example, “training in high position” does not explain what skills or experience you hope to gain, and the plan for maintaining your work is uncertain because you offer alternatives without explaining how they would be agreed or managed. The request for help could also be more specific, such as asking the manager to discuss a suitable schedule and contact the head office.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally sensible order: it introduces the request, gives reasons, discusses work arrangements, and closes politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “however” and “Please let me know” support the reader’s understanding. At times, though, the progression is weakened by repeated requests, particularly “I want to request you to give me permission” after a similar request in the previous paragraph. Some links are also unclear: “because of that company provide opportunity” does not clearly connect the reason to the request. To improve, give each paragraph one clear function and use more precise transitions between the reason, proposed work plan, and practical assistance needed.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main purpose, including “training,” “higher position,” “work online,” and “accommodation.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations sound unnatural, which sometimes makes the message less clear. For instance, “training in high position” and “build my future carrier” do not express your intended meaning accurately; “career” is the relevant word, while “career development” would be a more natural phrase. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “absoluetly,” “becasue,” “accomodation,” and “informationnfrom.” Aim to use precise workplace vocabulary and proofread spelling, especially in key requests.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the sentence beginning “I understand that you may have busy schedule, however…”. The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. Examples include “I am writing to request you that i would like,” where the request structure is faulty, and “the company provide opportunity,” which needs correct subject–verb agreement and an article. Articles and pronouns also need attention in “a permission” and “if its possible.” Punctuation is sometimes inaccurate, particularly where a comma joins clauses around “however.” Practise clear request forms such as “I am writing to ask whether…” and check articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries when editing.

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