Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to asking apportunity in head office role in another country for six months to learn new skills and to obtain knowledge.

Firstly, if you give me chance to go their it will not only beneficial for me but also helps in company's growth. Moreover, As I have a accountant skills which they are looking for, I can also take a part in different task that will make my resume more strong. It will assist me to contribute in this company.

In the meanwhile, I will handle my project and other task so I can also complete my work. I would like to request you to give me chance to work in head office for better understanding my work and learning a how to co-operative in high work load.

Thank you for your support and guidance, i will look after for your response.

Yours Faithfully

Vrutika

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt: the purpose of the request, the plan for handling current work, and a request for assistance. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how work will be handled is vague, stating only that you will 'handle my project and other task'. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific details about how your responsibilities will be covered or delegated. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, though the lack of detail prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'In the meanwhile' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'In the meanwhile' to introduce a work plan. Additionally, there are some issues with referencing and sentence flow, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between your skills and the company's growth could be smoother. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear enough for the reader to understand your intent.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You use basic phrases like 'make my resume more strong' and 'obtain knowledge'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'asking apportunity' (should be 'asking for an opportunity') and 'co-operative in high work load' (should be 'cooperating under a heavy workload'). While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and the errors occasionally draw attention to the language rather than the message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('As I have a accountant skills which they are looking for'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms ('to asking apportunity', 'learning a how to'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the writing.

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