Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest about working in our head office which is located in California, USA.

As you aware, I have been working with this India branch since past seven years. In those, gained valuable experience under your supervision. Now, I would love to explore experience by working in our USA based head office for my overall career growth. It will provide me great chance to learn extra ordinary skills for company by working with different Collegus and environment. Ultimately, will be able to achieve next milestone of my life.

Work for current head office will be handle my co worker and apart from that I will be available virtually any time of the day for solving issues.

Its my humble request to you to helping me out to achieve this dream and provide me a chance to take my career at next level.

I will be wait for your response.

Your sincerely,

Amex

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, proposing a plan for your current workload, and asking for assistance. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how your work will be handled is quite vague ('will be handle my co worker'), lacking specific details on the handover process or project management. To achieve a higher band, you should expand on these points with more concrete examples or professional justifications. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure could be more polished to better reflect a professional request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions between sentences are occasionally abrupt, such as the jump between your career growth goals and the logistics of your current workload. Paragraphing is present, but the connection between ideas could be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the subject of sentences is occasionally omitted, making the flow feel slightly disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your request clearly. You use some relevant professional terms like 'career growth' and 'milestone'. However, there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'extra ordinary skills' (should be 'extraordinary') and 'Collegus' (colleagues). Additionally, the phrase 'I will be wait for your response' is grammatically incorrect and lexically weak. To improve, focus on using more precise professional collocations and ensure that your spelling is accurate, as these errors occasionally distract the reader from your message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the overall accuracy. Common issues include missing articles ('with this India branch'), incorrect verb forms ('will be handle my co worker'), and subject-verb agreement errors ('As you aware'). While the meaning remains understandable, these persistent errors indicate a lack of control over complex structures. To reach a higher band, you should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical consistency, particularly with verb tenses and prepositions, and aim to construct more error-free complex sentences.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.