Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Brown,

I am writing this letter to make a request regarding work. I would like to do apprenticeship for 6 months in your head office in the Australia . I have ben been serving as junior manager in your company at Canada branch since 2 years.

I wanted to do this work to improve my managment skills. I would like to do this work in my spare time. One of my friends, who works at your company's head office in the Australia . He suggested me to apply and join the Zoom Session to develop my management skills.I believe this opportunity will help me enhance my management abilities, which will benefits both my professional growth and the company. The knowledge and skills I gain will enable me to manage my responsibilities more efficiently and contribute more productivity to the organization.

It would be greatly appreciated if you could help me with this matter and provide the necessary information.

I look forward to your response.

Yours sincerely,

Bijal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, which is a positive start. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. Specifically, the second bullet point regarding how your work would be covered while you are away is not addressed; you mention wanting to do the work in your 'spare time,' which is not a professional solution for a six-month secondment. To improve, ensure you provide a realistic plan for your current responsibilities, such as delegating tasks to a colleague or training a temporary replacement. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, but the content needs more professional depth to fully satisfy the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. Paragraphing is used, though the middle section is somewhat disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'I believe' and 'which will,' but the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. For example, the transition between your reason for wanting to go and the mention of your friend is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your request clearly. You use some relevant professional terms like 'junior manager,' 'professional growth,' and 'responsibilities.' However, there are some word choice errors, such as 'do apprenticeship' (should be 'undertake an apprenticeship') and 'contribute more productivity' (should be 'contribute more productively'). There are also minor errors with articles, such as 'in the Australia.' To improve, focus on collocations—words that naturally go together—and proofread for small errors that affect the precision of your language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'I have ben been serving' (repetition/spelling), 'since 2 years' (should be 'for 2 years'), and 'He suggested me to apply' (should be 'He suggested that I apply'). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, work on verb tense consistency and the correct use of prepositions and articles.

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