Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Smith,

Hope this letter finds you well. Being a staff member in you company branch in Singapore, I am writing this letter to request you to permit me to work in India for few months.

Actually, as you know I am my parents only child working in your company in Singapore since past few years. My parents our not feeling good living alone for past few weeks and requesting me to stay with them for some time, my mother is also going through a medical treatment and want me with her to take care.

however, I can work in our India's Head office of our company, I will prove to be a good employee of this company there as well. I will be connected with Singapore's company through online web and help other staff from there in those six months. Moreover, working in the company's head office will help me to gain more knowledge about company's goals.

I request you if you can please arrange all the transferring documents and ask a manager from the head office to provide me a six months job offer letter.

Looking forward for your response.

Your's truly,

Kom

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, proposing a solution for the workload, and asking for administrative help. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal business request. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how the work will be managed is quite brief and lacks specific detail regarding the transition of responsibilities. While the purpose is clear, the response would benefit from more professional elaboration on how the company would benefit from this arrangement, rather than focusing primarily on personal reasons. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the depth of the content is basic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. There is a clear progression from the introduction to the request, the explanation, and the closing. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the transition 'however' at the start of the third paragraph is used incorrectly, as it does not contrast with the previous paragraph. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as 'Singapore's company' and 'our India's Head office'. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would help the flow of the letter significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the message to be conveyed clearly. There are some instances of awkward phrasing and minor errors, such as 'since past few years' instead of 'for the past few years' and 'our not feeling good' instead of 'are not feeling well'. The student attempts to use business-related terminology like 'transferring documents' and 'job offer letter', which is appropriate for the context. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there is a reliance on basic vocabulary. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'my parents our not'), article usage (e.g., 'in you company branch'), and prepositional errors (e.g., 'in Singapore's company'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices in the second paragraph. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. The student should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and sentence boundary punctuation.

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