Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear manager,

i hope you are doing good and enjoying your life, i am writing this letter to request to you to shift me the to head office for six months.

i want to work there to upgrade my skills and knowledge, working with all the other talented people who have more skills can upgrade mine as well and at the same time it will improve my confidence for future and going to another country and learning new culture will be a refreshment for me.

while i will be away from here raghav will take care of all my work from behind and at the same time i will be in touch with him taking updates about all the work.

i would like to request you to arrange all the required means and guide me how i can work in the head office for next six months.

Thankyou,

fazeel javed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: explaining the motivation, proposing a handover plan, and requesting assistance. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. The explanation for wanting to work at the head office is clear but relies on simple reasoning. The plan for the workload is mentioned, but lacks detail regarding how the transition will be managed or how the quality of work will be maintained. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal request, though the opening is slightly informal. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the professional benefits for the company, not just yourself, and provide a more structured plan for the handover.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited. The sentences are often joined by simple conjunctions like 'and' or 'while', and there is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas more fluidly. For example, the transition between the motivation and the handover plan is abrupt. Improving the use of transition signals such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help create a more professional flow and improve the overall structure of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. Phrases like 'doing good', 'shift me', and 'work from behind' are either grammatically incorrect or lack the professional register required for a formal business letter. While the meaning is clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use more precise or sophisticated terminology related to business or professional development. To improve, focus on using more formal collocations and business-appropriate vocabulary to convey your request more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the quality of the writing. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('shift me the to head office'), subject-verb agreement, and punctuation errors, such as the lack of capital letters for 'i' and the misuse of commas to create run-on sentences. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are persistent throughout the text. Increasing the accuracy of basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation would significantly improve your score.

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