Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to inform you that i am interested to move to Paris where our head office is located and would love to be a part of the team there.

When i first joined this company, i always hoped for more exposure and opportunities where i do not feel like i am stuck at a single place and have chances to explore, meet new people and learn to adapt to different culture and diversity. And I believe moving to the main office and working there would be a great way to experience new culture as well as my first step to show my talent and hardwork to the upper directors as well.

Moreover, I will make sure to meet your expectations and simultaneously will also focus on finishing my weekly tasks remotely.

Lastly, i would be very grateful if you can look into the procedures of covering my travelling and other expenses as well as help me find an accommodation that is nearby our head office.

Thank you

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explain your motivation for the move, touch upon how your work will be managed, and include a request for assistance with logistics. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how your work will be covered is quite vague; mentioning that you will 'focus on finishing my weekly tasks remotely' lacks the professional detail expected in a formal business request. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific details about how your current responsibilities will be handed over or managed during your absence to demonstrate a more professional approach.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the purpose of the letter to your motivations, then to work arrangements, and finally to your specific requests. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'Lastly' to link your paragraphs. However, the paragraphing is somewhat inconsistent; the body of the letter is compressed into a few dense blocks, and the transition between your personal motivations and the practical work arrangements could be smoother. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some appropriate phrases like 'exposure and opportunities' and 'adapt to different culture'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are also minor issues with word choice, such as 'move to Paris' (which could be more formal, e.g., 'transfer to the Paris office') and 'covering my travelling' (which is slightly unnatural). To improve, try incorporating more precise business-related terminology and avoiding overly simplistic phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several recurring grammatical errors. Specifically, you frequently fail to capitalize the personal pronoun 'I' (e.g., 'i am interested', 'i always hoped'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors, such as 'experience new culture' (should be 'a new culture') and 'at a single place'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic capitalization and article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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