Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Chessman,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to request you support to enhance my horizons by working at our company's head office abroad.

Firstly, I feel proud of being a part of an international business which has broden my work knowledge significantly. Therefore, I request our comapny to allow me work six months in our head office to get valuable experiance.

Fuerthermore, most of my work can be done remotely, I would be able to take some time out everyday to fullfil my current work responsiblities when I am away.

Lastly, I would appreciate it if you could assist me to get approval for the head office and to compete the arrangement application. If possible, could you please check that whether travel expenseis covered by company or not?

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your prompt response.

Yours sincerely,

Smit Surti

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state the purpose of the request, explain the remote work arrangement, and ask for assistance with the application process. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation of how your work will be managed remotely is quite brief and lacks specific detail regarding how you will maintain productivity or communication with your current team. Expanding slightly on the 'how' would have provided a more persuasive argument, which is expected at higher band levels.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each requirement, and a formal closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'Lastly' to signal the progression of your points. While the structure is sound, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the letter follows a standard business format. To improve, you could vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between your request for support and the specific question about travel expenses is smoother.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using formal expressions like 'enhance my horizons' and 'valuable experience'. However, there are several spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'broden' (broaden), 'comapny' (company), 'experiance' (experience), 'Fuerthermore' (Furthermore), 'fullfil' (fulfill), 'responsiblities' (responsibilities), and 'expenseis' (expenses). These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. While the meaning remains clear, the high frequency of spelling mistakes prevents a higher score in this criterion. Focusing on proofreading your work for common spelling errors would significantly improve your performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the conditional 'If possible, could you please check...'. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'request you support' (request your support) and 'allow me work' (allow me to work). Additionally, the sentence 'most of my work can be done remotely, I would be able to...' is a comma splice, which should be corrected with a semicolon or a conjunction. Despite these errors, the meaning is always clear, and the grammar does not impede communication. Increasing the variety of complex structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement will help raise your score.

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