Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Pret,

I hope you are doing well. I would like to bring in your notice about the vacancy been advertise for six months in Malaysian head office. I would like to avail this opportunity to gain some international experience.

As you know that I am currently working in financial management department and spend approximately 2.5 years in this. Now, I would like to explore international opportunities in head office for six months. Moreover, I would like to know how finances being deal in global markets and how they accurately managed at this level.

However, I request one of my colleague Mr. Alex who will take responsibility of my work in my absence and he is completely fine with it. In addition, I will keep in touch with my department through emails and telephonic calls.

I would highly appreciate if you could consider my request and support me for this prestigious opportunity. Furthermore, I would try to implement my skills and knowledge that I learn from head office so that we can do more better for our company.

Thank you

Shahrukh Ishtiaq

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining the reason for the request, proposing a handover plan, and asking for assistance. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention wanting to gain international experience, you could have elaborated more on how this specific head office role would benefit your current professional growth or the company's long-term goals. The plan for your workload is clear, but the request for help is slightly generic. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but more depth in the explanation would elevate the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'In addition' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions are used slightly inaccurately; for instance, 'However' is used to introduce a solution rather than a contrast. Additionally, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used to show the correct logical relationship between ideas would improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'vacancy', 'financial management', and 'prestigious opportunity'. There are, however, several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'bring in your notice' (should be 'bring to your attention'), 'vacancy been advertise' (should be 'vacancy advertised'), and 'how finances being deal' (should be 'how finances are dealt with'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a need for more precise control over collocations and grammatical structures related to vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'spend approximately 2.5 years in this' (missing subject 'I have'), 'how they accurately managed' (missing auxiliary verb 'are'), and 'do more better' (incorrect comparative form). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of passive voice, and ensuring that auxiliary verbs are included in your complex sentence constructions.

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