Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Hello sir/Mum
I am writing to inform you that as i have been working for MNC company and i would like to spend my next six months in our one of head office in another country.
As you know that as i always dream of i want to travel and explore new countries and our international firm also widespread in different countries so it will be great chance for me to spend my next six months our one of head office in foreign country.
Furthermore, I was have working monday to saturday 9 to 5pm job for this company and I always want to work five days a week so I dicided to work outside in another country for next six month, so I will be explore their culture and meet our international co-worker s and it will be greet chance to exchange the ideas of company and how will take our company to next level.
Moreover it would be a great for me if you can arrange my tickets and my accomodation for next six months in head office in another country.
Yours faithfully
Vraj Patel.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter covers all three bullet points, but the development is weak. While you explain why you want to go, the explanation regarding how your work will be covered while you are away is missing. You mention wanting to work five days a week, but you do not explain how your current responsibilities will be managed during your absence. The tone is also inconsistent; starting with 'Hello sir/Mum' is inappropriate for a formal business letter. To improve, ensure you address every part of the prompt with specific, relevant details and maintain a professional tone throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect clauses. Some sentences are difficult to follow due to poor sentence structure, which impacts the overall flow. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, clear idea to help the reader follow your argument more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You rely on simple words like 'great' and 'work' throughout the letter. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'our one of head office' instead of 'one of our head offices' and 'widespread' used incorrectly as a verb. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more precise business-related vocabulary and avoid repeating the same phrases. Focus on learning collocations appropriate for professional correspondence to make your writing sound more natural and sophisticated.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include incorrect verb tenses ('I was have working'), subject-verb agreement, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when you attempt more complex constructions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and the informal opening. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb-object order, and proofread your work to correct common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms before submitting.
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