Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to request permission to work at our head office for six months in another country.I am ghanshyam Patel fro xyz branch.
I am writing here work for six month in india because there is lot of space for new learnig skill and for my growth. I know very well there is lot of expirence person. I help for good learning skill. That is better for my career . There is more space for my work things.
Next things is my work so I completed work before I leave. And also one persone traine my behalf. Anything urgent then I available on phone or email. No need to worries about my work.
I appriciate otherwise you arranging work. You me just six months. I promise never give to chance for aarguments.
I waiting for your next hearing.
Your Sincerly,
Ghanshyam Patel
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the handover plan, and the request for assistance. However, the development of these ideas is limited and at times unclear, such as the vague explanation of 'space for new learning skill'. Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. The tone is inconsistent, shifting between formal and informal, and the lack of clarity in the explanation of how work will be managed makes the proposal less persuasive. To improve, you should expand on your points with specific examples and ensure the letter meets the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas smoothly; for example, the transition between explaining the work handover and asking for help is abrupt. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'Next things is my work'. To improve, you should use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your thoughts and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'work', 'good', and 'things'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'learnig', 'expirence', 'persone', 'traine', and 'appriciate'. These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow. To reach a higher band, you need to use a more varied range of vocabulary appropriate for a professional context. Instead of repeating 'work', try using synonyms like 'responsibilities', 'tasks', or 'professional development'. Focus on improving your spelling and learning common collocations used in business correspondence.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('in india'), incorrect verb forms ('I help for good learning skill'), and subject-verb agreement issues ('one persone traine my behalf'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. The attempt at complex sentences is limited and often results in errors that impede clarity, such as 'I promise never give to chance for aarguments'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and the use of prepositions, before attempting more complex structures.
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