Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Gaurav,

I hope you are doing well. I am Wittring this letter to inform you that i am working at a Mohali office in India. In this letter i am going to express my interest in the ambition that i had from the first day of work, when i joined this company.

As everyone know that our company's head office in Montreal QC. My dream was that one day i will also went to Canada for some time and gain some knowledge and experience about the work.

I think by attending 6 months orientation i am going to learn about the environment and gain knowledge about how to deal with foreign clients and get some tips from my seniors. I can do all my jobs through the remote access. As you know, my financial condition is also not very well. Can you please help me to sponsor this trip.

I am looking forward to getting here back from you.

Warm regards,

Harman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: the reason for the request, the plan for remote work, and the request for assistance. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding the 'financial condition' is slightly abrupt and lacks professional context, which is important for a formal request to a manager. While the purpose is clear, the tone fluctuates between professional and overly personal. To improve, you should focus on expanding the benefits to the company rather than focusing on personal financial needs, as this would make the request more persuasive and appropriate for a workplace setting.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. For example, the transition between the reason for the trip and the remote work plan is abrupt. There is a reliance on simple sentence structures, and the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition to this'). The paragraphing is sufficient, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more sophisticated signposting to ensure a smoother progression of ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. However, there is a lack of variety and some instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'getting here back from you' instead of 'hearing back from you'. You rely on basic vocabulary like 'good', 'work', and 'knowledge'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more topic-specific collocations related to professional development and international business, such as 'professional growth', 'cross-cultural collaboration', or 'operational continuity'. Spelling errors like 'Wittring' also detract from the overall quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have frequent errors with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, such as 'i am working at a Mohali office' (should be 'in'), 'everyone know' (should be 'knows'), and 'i will also went' (should be 'go'). Additionally, there are persistent issues with capitalization, specifically the lowercase 'i' used throughout the text. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical rules and verb consistency would significantly improve your writing.

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