Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Aman,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to request that you could help me in arranging temporary position at our head office in Canada.

I would like to work in our head office because I want to learn international operations of our company by working overseas. It would be a grate chance for me to learn new skills by working and interacting with international staff. I hope the new skills will assist me to work more effiectively and efficiently when I will return back to my work.

While I will away from my work, I will manage my all work through online portal of our company. Due to different time zones, it would be easy for me to manage my tasks accordingly. I will also be available online for my staff for any assistance and guidance.

I would be a grateful if you could help me in completing all this process, and write it to HR for specific arrangements while staying in Canada. Your any advice would be help me to finalize my this decision.

Thank you for your consideration, and looking forward to meeting you soon at your convenience.

Yours faithfully,

Tanvir Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain the motivation for the transfer, propose a viable method for managing your workload remotely, and request the manager's assistance in the formal process. The tone is appropriate for a professional request. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, you could specify which particular skills you hope to acquire or provide more detail on how the online portal will facilitate your specific daily tasks. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing each prompt requirement, and a professional closing. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate different ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'While I will be away' and 'Due to different time zones' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally slightly mechanical. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that transitions between sentences are smoother. The referencing is generally clear, and the overall progression of the letter is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms like 'international operations', 'temporary position', and 'at your convenience'. There are some minor errors, such as 'grate' (great) and 'effiectively' (effectively), which are spelling slips. Additionally, phrases like 'write it to HR' are slightly unnatural; 'liaise with HR' or 'initiate the process with HR' would be more precise. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, incorporating more sophisticated collocations would elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I am writing to request that you could help me' (should be 'request your help' or 'request that you help'), 'I will away' (missing 'be'), and 'Your any advice would be help me' (should be 'Any advice you could provide would help me'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you reach a higher band.

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