Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Marc,
I hope this message finds you well. I am formally writing to express my intrest in working at our head office in Toronto for 6 months
I am currently working as Jr developrer for your company in Banglore. Since past 10 months , I have been collaborating & working on a cruical project with our toronto team. We are able to make an impressive progress on this project and we are looking forward to conclude it within the next 6-7 months. However, timezone differnce has been the major hurdle between our work.As a results, I am not able to give enough time to my family and it is really affecting my work-life balance.
Therefore, I would really appreciate if you apporve my request to join our head office for next 6 months and please be assured it would be enough to successfullly complete the task for our client.
I am looking forward to hear back from you
Your's obediently.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining the reason for the transfer, suggesting how the work will be managed, and requesting assistance. However, the second bullet point regarding how your work could be done while away is underdeveloped. You mention the project timeline but do not explicitly explain how your current responsibilities in Bangalore will be handled or covered during your absence. To improve, ensure each bullet point is fully expanded with specific details. The tone is generally appropriate for a professional request, though the closing 'Your's obediently' is not suitable for a business letter to a manager; 'Sincerely' or 'Best regards' would be more professional.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However' and 'Therefore' to link ideas. However, the paragraphing is slightly disjointed, and the transition between the project details and the request for the transfer could be smoother. Some sentences are a bit abrupt, and the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect your personal situation with the professional request more fluidly. Overall, the message is easy to follow, but the cohesion is somewhat mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'collaborating', 'crucial project', and 'work-life balance'. However, there are several spelling errors, such as 'intrest', 'developrer', 'Banglore', 'cruical', 'differnce', 'results', 'apporve', and 'successfullly'. These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable. While the meaning remains clear, the high frequency of spelling mistakes limits your score in this criterion. To reach a higher band, focus on proofreading your work to eliminate these basic orthographic slips and try to incorporate more precise professional collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Since past 10 months, I have been collaborating...'. There are several grammatical inaccuracies, including 'Since past 10 months' (should be 'For the past 10 months'), 'As a results' (should be 'As a result'), and 'looking forward to hear' (should be 'looking forward to hearing'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of '&' instead of 'and' and missing commas. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they occur frequently throughout the text, which prevents a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb forms.
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