Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Sharma,

I am writing to request you formally about my transfer to company's head office in USA for next six months from our current Mexico location .

Since, I have started working with Apple, I always intrested in exploring the opportunity to work in main the branch. Currently, USA has offered six months period to work in their head office to learn their work culture. I think, I am the best suited candidate from our branch to move to USA to enhance skills and learn professional norms.

I assured you that my curent job duties and work will not create any hurdle for our oraganization when I will be away. My assistant will manage all my duties and handle projects. Moreover, I will assist him whenever he needed me and review his drafts before final submissions.

It would be thankful if you could recommend my name to USA branch and assist me in arranging my accomodation their. Plus, please provide me any curial information that could be beneficial for me to understand the culture and enviornment of Head office. So, that I will not feel isolated over there.

I hope you will consider my request and l will be available to discuss any further details with you anytime soon.

Yours faithfully,

Kamal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly explain the motivation for the transfer, outline a plan for your current duties, and request assistance with logistics. The tone is appropriate for a formal business request. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation of how your work will be covered is a bit generic. To reach a higher band, provide more specific details about the handover process or the nature of the projects your assistant will handle. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are fully met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the request, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Plus' to link ideas. However, the transition between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some referencing is slightly unclear (e.g., 'USA has offered six months period'). Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the flow and cohesion of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms such as 'formally', 'transfer', and 'professional norms'. However, there are several spelling errors ('intrested', 'curent', 'oraganization', 'curial', 'enviornment') and some awkward word choices, such as 'It would be thankful' instead of 'I would be grateful'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider grasp of common business collocations. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise professional terminology would improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'Since, I have started working' (incorrect comma usage and tense), 'I assured you' (should be 'I assure you'), and 'whenever he needed me' (tense inconsistency). Additionally, there are minor errors with articles, such as 'in main the branch'. While these errors are frequent, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage in formal correspondence.

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