Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr Kapoor,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to express my interest to work in the head office of our company in Japan for a six months.

I have been working in our company for the last five years as a manager, now I have a desire to explore new workplace and gain knowledge regarding new working styles and techniques in order to develop professional skills. For example, work with various cultural employees in abroad will enhance my communication, cooperation, teamwork and critical thinking abilities. As a result, it will boost-up my confidence, increase productivity and improve my professional reputation among the staff.

While I am away from my current work, all responsibilities will take by my colleagues, and I will provide them training about how to handle and complete every tasks or projects within deadlines. Also, if they will get stuck in any problems, I will try to keep in touch with them through emails or phone calls in order to resolve their difficulties and guide them properly.

It would be appreciated if you could request your manager regarding give me a chance to spend six months in Japan, Also access me transfer details in advance, therefore, I can start training session for my co-workers.

I hope you consider my request and do something to get permission from the manager of our company. I look forward to hearing from you.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Twinkle

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the prompt effectively. You clearly explained your motivation for the transfer, proposed a plan for your current workload, and requested assistance from your manager. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. The ideas are well-developed, particularly the benefits of the transfer for your professional growth. To reach a higher band, ensure that all instructions are followed precisely; for instance, the request for the manager to contact their superior could be phrased more naturally to reflect standard corporate hierarchy. Overall, the response is purposeful and fully satisfies the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear progression of ideas. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You use some cohesive devices such as 'For example', 'As a result', and 'While I am away', which help connect your thoughts. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the use of 'Also' at the start of sentences could be improved by using more varied linking words or phrases to enhance the flow. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, body, and conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms like 'professional reputation', 'productivity', and 'responsibilities'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'work with various cultural employees in abroad' (should be 'employees from different cultures abroad') and 'access me transfer details' (should be 'provide me with transfer details'). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, these occasional errors in collocation and phrasing prevent the score from being higher. Focusing on more natural collocations will help improve your precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. For example, 'interest to work' should be 'interest in working', 'a six months' should be 'six months', and 'all responsibilities will take by my colleagues' should be 'will be taken by my colleagues'. Additionally, there are issues with verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'if they will get stuck'. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher band score. More attention to proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy is recommended.

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