Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
- say how your work could be done while you are away
- ask for his/her help in arranging it
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Manager,
I am Amrit working as a process assistant in your company. I hope this letter finds you well. Today, I am writing this letter to bring your attention to move my position in head office for six month which is in London.
Commencing with the reason why I want to work in head office, the reason is that my family is currently living in London. Due to family function my presence is mandatory there. So, I decide to work in London head office even it would be golden opportunity for me explore the head office and their facilities.
Moreover, while working in head office I will conduct on meetings with the associates in case they have any issue or concern they can connect with me on teams in business hours. Before, go to London I will hand over my work to well trained staff so that everything going smoothly.
Hence,I would be grateful if you accept my application with in a week so that I can apply for visa process because it has their policies for process time.
Thank you for considering my application. I look forward your response.
Best,
Amrit
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly state the reason for the request (family commitments in London), explain how your work will be managed (handing over tasks and remote availability), and ask for assistance with the process. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For example, the explanation regarding how your work will be covered is quite brief and lacks professional detail. To improve, ensure that your ideas are more fully extended to demonstrate a more professional tone appropriate for a formal request to a manager.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use some basic cohesive devices such as 'Commencing with', 'Moreover', and 'Hence' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or unnatural in a professional context. Additionally, the flow between sentences is occasionally interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the progression of ideas feel a bit disjointed at times. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would help elevate your score in this area.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your needs clearly. You use some relevant business-related terms like 'process assistant', 'hand over', and 'application'. However, there are instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'bring your attention to move my position' and 'due to family function'. These errors indicate a limited range of collocation and stylistic awareness. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise professional collocations and avoid literal translations that sound unnatural in English.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include 'I am Amrit working as', 'I decide to work', 'on meetings', and 'Before, go to London'. These errors, particularly with verb tenses and prepositions, are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. While the meaning remains clear, the frequency of these slips prevents the text from being considered highly accurate. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will significantly improve the quality of your writing.
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