Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my interest working in head office, which is in Canada. It has been six years I have been working in same location and on company's job board there is a job posting for temporary Quality Department Manager at Vancouver location.

In addition, I will be the perfect candidate for this job opportunity because of my former experience working in quality department in Delhi branch. Moreover, I can contribute towards the launch of new product of our company, which will be the best upcoming product from our organization.

Lastly, regarding the work in Delhi office branch, I can arrange someone from the office itself, and I will make sure that all the work should be done on time with same accuracy and dedication. Thus, this is the formal request of mine to approve my application for this job position and assist me for the further process in documentations.

I look forward to hearing from you and would appreciate your assistance in arranging this opportunity.

Yours Sincerely,

Tim Cook

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt. You clearly state the reason for your interest in the Vancouver office, explain how your current workload will be managed, and request assistance with the process. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention arranging for someone to cover your work, you do not specify how you will train them or ensure a smooth handover. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Dear Sir/Madam' is slightly impersonal given that you are writing to your manager. To improve, ensure you provide more specific details to fully support your request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Moreover', and 'Lastly' to guide the reader through your points. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly repetitive. The referencing is generally clear, though the connection between your experience in Delhi and the specific requirements of the Vancouver role could be more tightly linked to improve the overall progression of your argument. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different stages of your request.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'temporary', 'candidate', 'opportunity', and 'dedication'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'interest working' (should be 'interest in working') and 'formal request of mine' (which sounds slightly unnatural). While you successfully convey your meaning, the vocabulary is somewhat functional and lacks the precision or variety that would characterize a higher band score. Expanding your range to include more sophisticated collocations related to professional requests would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'It has been six years I have been working' (should be 'I have been working... for six years') and 'assist me for the further process' (should be 'assist me with the process'). Additionally, there are missing articles, such as 'in head office' (should be 'in the head office'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions will help improve your accuracy.

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