Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months
• say how your work could be done while you are away
• ask for his/her help in arranging it

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr.Smith,

I am writing to express my interest in spending six months at the company's head office in London.

I am currently working in the retail department with the company and have worked in several domestic locations in the past. However, I am interested in working at the head office to gain experience across different departments. I would like to improve my knowledge by learning how our company deals with international suppliers and the production of different designers' clothes.

I would be able to consistent to my responsibilities while working far from my allocated site. I would communicate with the team and regular clients via email or voice calls. In addition, I will hand over tasks which requires to complete in these months. Also, I would assign a responsible team member who will keep me updated.

I would appreciate it if you could arrange my transfer to London for six months by discussing the offer with head office. I would be delighted to share the knowledge to my colleagues that I would aquire from there.

Looking forward for a positive response.

Yours faithfully,

Navjot

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explained your motivation for the transfer, outlined a plan for managing your current responsibilities, and made a polite request for your manager's assistance. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. To reach a higher band, you could expand slightly on the specific benefits to the company, rather than just focusing on your own professional development. For example, explaining how your international experience would specifically help the team upon your return would strengthen the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition' and 'However' to link ideas. However, the transition between sentences could be smoother. For instance, the second paragraph feels a bit disjointed. Using a wider range of cohesive markers or improving the flow between sentences would help the text move more naturally. Overall, the structure is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'retail department', 'international suppliers', and 'allocated site'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'be able to consistent to' (should be 'be able to remain consistent with') and 'tasks which requires to complete' (should be 'tasks which require completion'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'tasks which requires to complete' (subject-verb agreement and passive voice error) and 'share the knowledge to my colleagues' (preposition error; should be 'share the knowledge with'). Additionally, 'Looking forward for a positive response' should be 'Looking forward to a positive response'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences would improve your score.

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